Someone Get Me a Doctor, Someone Call the Nurse - Comments

I think I'm in the "Loved it" boat lol.
Yeah, I'm pretty much speechless really. If that's what it takes for them to start their romantic relationship, then I'm all for it lol. I can't wait to read the next few chapters to see how the ball gets rolling :)
All I have to say is damn he must be good in bed. Do you know how hard it is for both people to have orgasms at the same time? Not to mention amazing ones lol
Can't wait to see what happens next! :)

All I have to say is, OMG!
I loved this, they are just so ahhhh!
Haha. More soon!
<3

Well it had to happen some time. You wrote it well and I don't think they are moving too fast. I wonder what their reactions are going to be when they wake up and are thinking clearly. Hope you update soon.

Loved the updates. The tension is definately building. I like the idea of her crying when Hyphestion died. I also like the humor you throw in. I'm looking forward to your next update.

Thanks. I kind of got sidetracked while writing because my roommate kept talking to me. Sorry for the repeats. D: I may go back and fix a few things.

First off, I'm excited to hear that! :) (above comment)
About the new chapter, I felt like the argument (from Maddie's POV) and anger was sort of unexpected, then she suddenly forgave him. It seemed a tad rushed, and I don't see why she was so angry about it in the first place... But that's just what I think. It's really weird, because from Jared's POV, everything was justified and I followed it a lot easier. I liked reading it from his POV.

I did notice that you used the same descriptions for quite a few things, for example the use of "fire" to describe the flower in both POV's, so perhaps next time make one of them describe an action or thing slightly differently, just to not sound like you're just repeating everything. Just a suggestion :)
When Jared scanned her body for injuries, I think it would have been cute to add in something about her checking her out or something like that, just to add some humour to lighten the mood a bit.
Otherwise, nice chapter, although quite scary. Can't wait to read the next chapter :)

Darkfallenangel" You read my mind. :D I'm really excited about posting all I've got up. I'm on 19 now in ms word, but I wanted to wait for everyone to catch up. Ideas have been popping up in my mind all week long. :3

Argh my laptop broke down for a day or so and I come back to see tons of updates!!! Crazy!!!
I like how you described his jealousy when Shannon was hugging her. That was original and conveyed his emotion clearly, which was good. :)
The skating chapter was definitely cute and I really enjoyed reading that one. It was awesome to see how well she fits in with the band and how her and Jared get along, and it had this good vibe to it, as if they were on their first date kind of thing.
I also liked how you said they were ordinary people with extraordinary jobs, and that they can still be friends with someone who isn't famous. That made the story seem more realistic and less of a dream.
The part where Jared was getting butterflies was cute, and how she was saying she was glad to have met all of them and just the simple way you described how Jared felt then too was good.

As soon as you mentioned her graduation earlier in the story, I knew that Jared would turn up somehow, and you didn't disappoint :) I think you were right to skip a year. I doubt that would have been interesting to read at all lol. Very smooth the way they covered up how they really met, even though they didn't lie. It was also cool to see Jared feeling normal again. "Friend…not toy. Bad Jared." - Epic lol :D And a very pretty dress!
The losing the child scene was really sad. I feel like she's not quite cut out for being a doctor. Perhaps she's better, oh I dunno, on tour with a certain band in case there are injuries during the show in the crowd, or on stage for that matter? But anyway, I also liked how you said that everything just got better once Jared was there. They have something special and I really hope to read about them developing that something special soon :)
Keep up the good work!

Thanks. I was worried it may not be very good. I've got two chapters written that are going up soon. Things are definitely going to heat up. ;D

I loved the update. You had me in tears when the boy died. You put so much emotion in that chapter. You wrote it just right.

Aw...Why thank you!

You are such a tease! Now I really can't wait for your next update! Well done you definately know how to keep your readers interested.

:) thankies!

I loved the updates. You really write very well and I enjoy your story a lot. I hope you update soon as I can't wait to find out what happens next.

Hahaha...I had it the first time. Stupid MS word changed it. idk why. It's very dumb. Thanks though. I'm going to go fix it now.

Yes it has been a while, and it was quite short, but I really hope you'll make up for that soon :) It really is a good story and you should update/write more often :)
"...but only caught the tale end of her words..." I think the 'tale' should be a 'tail', as in end, not story, if you see what I mean?
Enjoyed reading and seeing how Jared felt. More soon please!

omg love it i wish there were more...

thankies! :)

Nice chapter. I really wish I had more to say than that, because I want to leave a meaningful comment, but I don't think I'll be able to lol.
There weren't any mistakes that I picked up and it was nicely written and yeah.
Looking forward to seeing where they end up :)

Thankies! I'm excited too. I picture him being like a little kid in the candy store. :)