Golden Children and the Others - Comments

I love this story.
Usually, I'm not much of a fan of HP fanfic, but this has got a certain tone and narration to it I like.
However with the huge host of new characters being thrown in at once, it's a little hard to remember everyone and their connections. Other than that, I quite like it.

This is absolutely brilliant! I love it. Your original characters are lovely and Rowling's characters are in character, which is always good :P Your style is great, not overloaded with description and the dialogue is wonderful and realistic.

"Reminds me of the old days, I guess. And Tonks." Oh gosh. That is so sad. :(

I love how you hyphenated Luna's last names. And she actually discovered Nargles! Brilliant.

This is really great, and I do plan on reading the rest later on. :)

ooooo A Harry Potter Fan Fiction. I usually stray away from these.
I'm always afraid that they will ruin the amazing books the J.K. Rowling put out there. This second generation HP story was good. You write well with a very minimal amount of grammatical errors. I enjoyed reading this.

a harry potter fan fiction, this should be good! Harry Potter is no doubt amazing :).

I like Faryn's character, and how the boys mess with her haha. Are the boys lke the sons of Dracco and Harry, or like younger siblings? Wait, is this during their parents time? Because it mentions James a lot. I think this is a very cute! I really like this story, I love how you made the characters your own. And the characters you made up fit in perfectly :). Wonderful job!

I love Harry Potter so much, so catching site of this was amazing. :D
I adore all the similarities but most of all I think I like the character development and detail for them.
Love the personalties and reactions so far as to what I've read to. :)
Definitely subbing, can't wait for more. :)

I'm sorry!
I didn't realize I already claimed this!

So I'll elaborate?

You've really managed to capture the aspect of setting, Hogwarts seems like an almost duplicate. The emotions are defined and not overly shown, and everything is realistic, but in a fantasy, fanfiction type way. :)

I love this, this is the first second gen HP fiction I've ever read and you've done such a wonderful job. You've captured settings, feeling, emotions - the whole nine yards - perfectly. You've got a lot of characters going on with this story, a lot of different personalities and separate descriptions, but you handle it quite well. Better than I ever could, that's for sure.

I think this is a really great idea. I love everything about it.

If there's something to improve on it'd just be to not tell so much, to show, just so that way we can get into the characters and the story just that little bit more.

At first I was a little bit over-whelmed by the characters, but I think I have all of their unique personalities figure out.

I haven't read any second generation HP fics, but I love this one.
I think you've taken an idea and made it your own. I think your characters are developed wonderfully!
I like how you've made things relevent to the original series, which just reminds the reader that it is a HP fic, and you keep it real.
Great job!

I think this was written brilliantly. I love how you’ve taken the familiar but twisted it into something that is entirely your own which is wonderfully original. I was actually surprised at how much I liked this, usually I find this kind of fic is all samey and well… boring. Whereas yours was quite the opposite. I really liked the characterization.

Sooo I think I already told you how much I adore this. No, seriously, I do. I love every single idea you have, including this one. Honestly, glitterati. basically said everything that I wanted to. xD Anyways, even though he sort of comes off as a jerk, Scorpius is a cutie - just like his dad ;D And Albus is a cutie as well. I love how you use canon and non-canon characters in this story - you make Faryn and Adalia so...real! It's very hard to find good canon/non-canon stories around here. This is truly a breath of fresh air! I really, really hope that this gets more comments soon or else I'll use a really horrible curse and nobody will like me for it >.>
Anyways, I'm definitely subbing to this. It's amazing and wonderful and I hope you update soon <3

This is really quite wonderfully written. :)

It has a really soft, warm quality to it; I don't know exactly how to explain it, but I love it. The plot isn't similar to the other Harry Potter fics I've read before, but it is quite familiar. I also think that maybe there are a lot of characters that have just been thrown in there. It's quite hard to keep up with everyone; who they are, who they're related to, where they're from, especially when they're given nicknames. It's kind of picky of me to say, but maybe you could add a little bit more information about each of the characters?

I love the voices you've given the sisters, and how original their personalities are. As a little side note, I love the name Faryn.

The summary is really well-written (not at all what I was expecting, I confess) and the layout is beautiful.

Overall, it's a great story so far and I wish you all the luck in the world with continuing it. (: