My Escapade - Comments

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YOU UPDATED TWICE!?
You either told me while I was in the car,
or I was too tired.
I forget...
x3

Ha! The summary kinda reminded me of me. I was that person in High School that didn't forget a thing people teased me about. My hair wasn't frizzy, and I didn't have thick glasses. I did have glasses though. I didn't wear them much. I did have the acne face. I still do, and it's bad. People were always calling be a scank. Thing is, I bathed regularly, every day, matter-o-fact. There was a time where I wore this jacket all the time. But it was always clean. I also thought it was funny that they would call me the scank when that's actually what they were. Scank also meant a dirty hoe. And that explains most of my class. I still am not popular among my HS classmates even though I am a sophomore in college. (It's like HS all over again on facebook sometimes. I just deleted everyone I hated. They are idiots. There are a lot of people who love me in the real world. I am a great person.) Anyway, writing is one of my favorite things to do. Almost like your character who likes journalism. There is a guy that I have been friends with for 3 or so years. He would be considered the person I never let go. But it's different between us now. I'm not over him completely. I still get jealous when he talks to other girls (That I know he likes). But he's not going to get anyone anytime soon. He's not all that popular either. I think if there was a guy like the one in your coffee shop, I would gladly go with him. You never do forget your first real crush. <3 I really like how your character sounds like me. Well, you know, the basic things. I'm sure I don't have the same personality as your character.

I absolutely adore this. I wasn't expecting it to be this good. Please write more child (Don't worry, I call everyone that). I'm really enjoying this and I love her boss lol. Bit cruel but ah well. Great plotline. I'm looking forwards to seing where it's going.

Two things though; 1; you might wanna copy and paste this into word and then your few grammar/spelling mistakes will come up and you can correct them easily.
And 2; Watch your brackets. "....The Black Kettle (which sounds kind of gothic, but it’s not. It’s like a slightly darker, more creative version of Starbucks), ever since I had started my job at The Times. "

If you read it you forget the initial sentence because of the brackets, you could write it in so it flows like this;
"...The Black Kettle ever since I had started my job at The Times. The name makes the cafe sound kind of gothic, but it’s not. It’s like a slightly darker, more creative version of Starbucks."

Bam. Next paragraph. Not saying you have to but I think it would be easier and flow nicely. :)

I really like this story and the whole idea. :) Please keep going!

really like this idea, puts a smile on my face as i think of all that could happen :P
update soon, please! <3

Hahaha, he was everywhere.
Reminds me of someone...
x3

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