Casimir Pulaski Day - Comments

So, I just looked at your characters..... LMFAO!!! NICK!

Jesus christ. This was my favorite chapter. Ever. <3 I love this story. Wow. I LOVE this chapter Mir!

Guilty of crying.
This story; especially the later chapters made me cry. It's the way you write and describe things. It really hit home.
SUBSCRIBED.
I can't wait to read more & I want to see where the story leads for Neve and Finn. I don't want Neve to die /:

xo

I feel bad for Neve. But I like that she has someone like Finn :)

There's some spacing issues...BUT

This is so adorable, and amazing, and just lovely.

I adore it. And I have nothing else to say because that word sums it all up. :)

The layout was beautiful by the way
This is a very intereting story, I love this story; the beginning got me hooked. I love the way it's written too.

I can't wait for more from you, by the way I'm gonna subscribe since I adore this so much.

<3

Like has been said before me a million and one times--the layout is stunning.

I honestly very much adore this. It's got a great beginning and while I don't know the entirety of the concept yet, I really like your character. I like the way she thinks and how she's a romantic just like every other teenage female in this day and age. She's certainly relatable which is an excellent quality to have in your writing. I have to agree with doves; though about that sentence being a bit awkward.

Also, the main thing I would work on is your paragraph transitions. They seem to jump from topic to topic a lot, but otherwise I really enjoy this and I think I'll subscribe. :3

First of all, I really loved the layout. It was beautiful. I especially loved the banner that you used. It is such a gorgeous picture.

“Why, ____” (I didn’t know his name yet) “yes, I thought you’d never ask”
This sentence, the fact that there is a phrase in parenthesis, looks a little weird to me. I think you should add you to where you have ____; I just think, to me, it would look a little better. But that is just me; you don't have to do it if you don't want to.

This is such a lovely story. I really enjoy your writing style; you put so much detail into your writing. You made the characters come alive with putting in their actions, how they talked and what they liked. I like the mystery of Neve, and how Finn is so curious about her. Anyway, this is a wonderful story; I love it.

This is gorgeous and I think that you should for sure continue. You've got a beautiful writing style - not one that I stumble upon quite often. I love stories about small towns, despite the one that I live in. x] Anyway, you've done a wonderful job with giving your characters life and making them 3D. People can relate to these characters. In a lot of stories, the characters seem to be flawless. But you've made them real. Anyway, I can tell this is going to be a grand story. Do keep up the brilliant work. Oh, and the layout is beautiful. :')

Ok soooooo beside you jacking my will you marry me tree, I loveeeeeeee this!!!! The layout is brilliant!!! You're story (stories) are great Mirrrr!!!!! Xoxoxox

I love this layout so much! It's so pretty! I don't get the title though...

Aww that's cute, that thing on the tree I mean. When your parents split up, it really is a bad thing, you don't know anything about your emotions anymore. I like this very much so far. It's so cute, I don't know any othe way to explain it though.

HOw old is this girl supposed to be? I'm guessing 16 or 17 but I wold like to know. I feel like she lives in like a small town, a cute at that. Aww her brother has diabetes, that's so sad. But, it's sweet how the girl takes care of him. Oh, her parents are pretty much stupid i guess you could say. At least Sammy ahs her though. I think her and Neve might have a little relationship going maybe later on? ;).

I love this story, like literally. You're doing an amazing job, keep it up!

It was beuitful and sweet will the tree thing then it got sad then ok again. I really enjoyed it and found it interesting

Your layout is absolute gorgeous and your summary is captivating, leaving me wanting to click the first link.

But I had told myself that if it burned down I would be ok…and I think I would. This line stuck out to me. I don't know why, I guess it's because she reassures herself like I do.

And that long awaited moment would be gone and I would move on with my life, remembering that moment forever. It's so pessimistic yet, I can see the truth within it.

I had a theory that grown-ups were too jaded too be in charge anyways. Touche.

Your descriptions are wonderful and you have no grammatical errors. I like how the first two chapters don't have much dialogue in them and you focus on pretty much setting the scene. It's really good and I can't wait to read more of it (:

You know what? I think I officially love this story too. I don't know why I do (well, it could be the fact that it's beautifully written). I don't usually like reading in the first point of view and whatnot, but I found myself not really caring, seeing as I was too wrapped up in your imagery than I had first expected.

The only thing that I noticed was that you didn't capitalize John's name in the first paragraph of the second chapter. But other than that, this is a wonderful piece, and I'm letting you know that I'm totally subscribing.

Well done, indeed.