Love in Death - Comments

The straightforward style you have in this is wonderful and unique but even though it’s like this you still managed to incorporate so much detail! I liked the first and last lines; they drew me in and left me wondering, which is always good.

One thing I noticed and maybe I’m wrong but: “Psychotic, deranged fans began sending her threating letters,” – I’m thinking it should be threatening.

But, I loved this to pieces and I really should read more of your writing!

This was too wonderful. Too wonderful.

The first paragraph was perfectly. The way you described the lovers was amazing--it gave me a perfect feel for just how deep their love went, and I loved the language you used. Modern, yet classic.

I adored the mention of divorce/single mothers. The way it was out of place snapped me back to reality--this story will not end well.

And then it didn't, which was amazing. Those crazy fans--that's quite realistic. People go nuts with their obsessions, not that I'm one to talk.

Overall, this was beautifully written and I loved it so much. You are so wonderful. <333