Taking Chances: Kayla's Chance - Comments

Oh I'm a big horse lover, so I'm glad that comment swap brought me here. I will say that when I read the title this was not what I expected at all, I was figuring a romance story about a boy meeting a girl or vise-versa, but this is a pleasant surprise.

layout: I think you should make a custom layout for this story, because it's like the cover to your story. Plus it can hint what the story entails. But at any rate at least this is easy to read...well the font is a little too small...on my computer screen, so I did zoom in a tad.

Chapter One: First thing is first, space out the paragraphs, it makes it hard to read with everything somewhat jumbled together.

Okay after reading the first couple of paragraphs, I believe you need to put more details into your descriptions. What's going on in the surroundings, what's it feel like to be on the stable grounds, just a few descriptions like that can take the reader to this place.

I do like the fact you give background information and it's not like an overload, it's the perfect amount to explain the history of the family, the horses, and the stables.

Oh and watch the grammar and capitalization's, there were a few I noticed, but it wasn't so many that I felt the need to point them out, there were like three I noticed.

Overall, I think this is a good story and definitely one of the few about horses on here, if you just space out the paragraphs, do a little grammar editing, and create a layout this would be an awesome story about horses.

I think you have a good start, so good work.

Loving this!! Update again soon! Good luck with your show, I'm showing this weekend too.

Whaaaa?? Drugs?! Grr!! Updates!! :) And you should look into making yourself a custom layout! :)

Update! :) I really like this!!

Hey, I do like where this story is going. Just want to remind you to watch the grammar. There are points when things are capitalized that shouldn't be, just minor stuff. For an easier read, try hitting "Enter" twice so that there's a free line between each paragraph. :) Good work.

Like, seriously. It's amazing.

I LOVE this :D Update soon, please!