Wow, brook, I really like this, but it worries me at the same time. Well, the layout is beautiful, I love the banner even though I don't agree with the saying. It's greatly written, dear. Keep writing<3 (:
I can relate to this so much - I won't lie, I definitely shed a few good tears while reading this. It hits you were it hurts the most, but it's the truth. This is seriously how my life has been for the past eight years, dealing with these disorders and the side effects and everything. I've seen so many eating disorder stories on this site and well, honestly, they don't really delve into the victim's mind as well as this did. This was absolutely perfect (: I'll be subbing to this and commenting on more chapters later <3
First of all, I absolutely adore the banner and layout. :) Second, I only read the last chapter, but this seems really interesting. Your writing seems to flow, and it's nice. Good job. :)
The layout it amazing! I love how your character has an alter ego. It's so different. The emotion and mood of this story is absolutely to die for. Hon', you've got something here.
Oh gosh, that was emotional! Poor Haley :( I enjoy this story very much! I love your writing skills. I love the banner and the interptation of the title. It is very hard to write about this, but I think it came out victorious here. Good job :) Pleease Updatee soon, please?
First off, I love the layout. The picture fits the story perfectly.
I like how she seems just like a normal girl and it's easy to understand what she's going through by how well you've written it. There are a few small mistakes but nothing too major.
The things that 'Ana' says make me laugh. They're so stupid yet, I'm sure when someone(your yourself, in this case) is screaming those things at you, you tend to take it to heart.
I think I've read one other eating disorder story on here and you've already done such a better job. I can't wait to see where you go with this. It's going to be a great story. :)
I love this story sdkfcskd. Haley is so relateable, and like someone else said it was a good idea to start at the healthy weight of 118 and show how it progresses. This is a great idea and your writing is wonderful <3
I love this layout so much <3 the banner picture is good too ;) Firework is what she wakes up too, good song She's relateable, dreading getting up in the morning the average life of any person on this earth haha :) Oh jeez, she thinks shes fat, eating disorder :( 118 is so skinny! Like depending on her height, that's nothing The poor thing, it's terrible that she thinks like that :( this is a wonderful start, it's a very good idea, and I'm sure it's going to be a great story :)
First, the layout is gorgeous, I love when they have backgrounds like yours does :3 And the banner fits perfectly.
Anyway, like other people have said I found a bunch of grammar and spelling mistakes, but none of them are huge; they're nothing a quick read through or a beta couldn't fix. But the mistakes don't take away from the overall story which is impressive. You've written this very realistically, you can really feel what Haley is going through and even understand the thought process behind it. Great job :)