this is one of the best storys on mibba. just to put ca bity of critisism in...i gets a little confused at times because its not written in a way im used to. you should read the guides. you havbe to leave a gap between speeces and start of speeces should be on a new line.
but i love the story so far. im subscribing xD look forward to regular comments on reghular updates.
I like it. But, with the dialouge to make it easier on the reader maybe you could seperate it. I have no clue if you know what I mean or not, but either way I like it. I do believe I will subscribe.
wowsies.... Her story was so tragic!!!! *sniff* It makes me wanna hit all the people who hurt her!!! Or kill them.... Either or... anywhos.... I LOVE THIS STORY!!! MORE PLEASE!!!