Heart of Glass - Comments

Wow amazing chapter :) seriously loved it! Can't wait to read the next one.

@ lungsmoke
I tried editing this chapter to delete the "A" and it still won't go away! And thank you for the advice. The reason I use this site is mostly for critique and advice to better my writing. I'll go through and edit the paragraphs a bit, and do the same when I post new chapters! Please keep reading, and comment if you will. I love the feedback, it's what keeps me motivated to write more!

A few lil things before I get to the comment bit.
There is a letter A at the very end of the chapter, which I don't think is supposed to be there. And also, the dialogue bits should get their own paragraphs (inclusive of the tag). I hate to mention them because then I sound like a critic (and I'm enjoying the story) but it kind of messes with the flow when reading and would also be easier on the eyes, instead of having huge chunky paragraphs.

OTHERWISE, aside from all of that blah, I'm so excited for this story. I haven't read it before (I'm noticing the other comments here) BUT I have a feeling it's going to be great. I'm still confused at Savannah's motives, but I think that was purposeful, so the reader won't know.

I love the description. It seems to be just there, instead of being forced, which makes it really nice to read. I love the slow feeling of the chapter (even though that might just be me hahaha) because when you're about to do the biggest thing in your life things must seem slow at some point, right? Anyway. I also want to know more about the other characters (especially Lucy, I think, since Savannah would've confided in her). Okay yup, quite stoked for this, and I've subbed and recc'd!

This is really nicely written! :) Update soon!

I miss this.

I love this story :D

Amazing!! Please update soon!! :)

please write more.....im addicted....

hear.... not here. woops... e.e

No, Quentin, NOW everything bad that could possibly happen just did. And I'm going to die slowly until it's all better again. I have a bad feeling it won't be. Also, is Quentin mad at them both? And why did you put them together, just to have them torn apart!?! I already know, but I just want to here to tell me anyways!

i know you've already updated twice, but I HAVE TO KNOW WHATS GONNA HAPPEN!

Although this is extremely depressing, I love it. I like how you expressed quinten's grief "quinten couldn't look at a fucking banana without bursting into tears"
Great story. Update soon :)

This story is brilliant!(: I love it!

I really love your story <3
Keep writing :3

I love this <3

I really like this story but I'm sorry....these guys are way too emotional. They cry a lot! It's almost not realistic. I love the story but I do hope the boys toughen up!

this story is so good. I cried when zoey said 'I want my sister back.' because I'm going through the same thing.
I just spent a while reading this, and it's 2:40am here.
you are such a talented writer. it's so good.

Great update! It kinda wasn't cool of Ty to say that... :/ Can't wait for more!

I absolutely adore your story! keep it up. i cant wait for the next one :)

THIS IS AMAZING!!! and sad! and cute! and happy! all at the same time <333
keep up the good work xD i'm waiting for the next update