Distant Cry - Comments

Most adorable story ever!

Cutest fucking story ever. My god.

Aw! It's over! That was so...ugh, I love it! Amazing ending!

Ha red cowboy boots under the wedding dress! I love it! Finally lol

You're back!!!! Oh how I hope that Gena gave up. Grrrrr people like that get under my skin. Great chapter! Can't wait for the rest!

Uh! That made me cry. I freaking love this story! I'm sad to see it end, but I can't wait for more!

I've miss this story so much and all ur other ones too! It was so sad! I can't wait for more!

This comment is going to be long again, cause you update quite often and I miss a lot of updates
Let's start with Chapter 22
Well, looks like Zacky kept his promise and let the men in town ride in his car
Hm, despite Jenette trying to keep her distance and try not to get hurt, it seems like it has already happened
And that's a really tough question she asked herself at the end
I know that she'd try anything in her might that Zacky would be able to keep Connor
But it'll still be a really tough task

Ps. There were two mistakes in this chapter.
"I hear it's made of aluminum," one man said. "That's one sweet little car. I wish my won was in town. He'd love to ride in this." -> should that word have been son?

"Maybe if I"m ever out this way again," Zacky promised. -> you have two apostrophes here, just delete one

Chapter 23
And they are making it way harder for themselves once Jenette has to go again
They do make one amazing couple, but they live in two completely different worlds
The only thing that connects them at the moment is that they have to go against Gena
Looks like they have to face Gena already in the morning, just when they have returned

Ps. Again, one small mistake.
"Before you came to the Applegate, I was happy believing that men were necessary to the world but not people I wanted to let into my world. Now, because of you, I've had to change my mind about men. Some of them are worth getting to know. -> you forgot the quotes at the end here

Chapter 24
I can't believe Gena, if she'd wanted to see her baby and care about him, she'd immediately realized that he'd have a dirty diaper or something and gone into the next room and changed him
They should have really said the words the wanted to say to her
She doesn't deserve one day in Conor's life
She doesn't even want him, she only wants to use him in order to get to Zacky

Ps. I found two mistaked in this too.
"I'm never doing that to you again," she promised, rocking him and cuddling him. "Waking you up from a sound sleep--not even giving you a chance to adjust or get a dry diaper. I would never want to hurt you. ->ou forgot quotes here at the end

"She didn't warm him up for you a bit when she thrust him into your life. Somehow I doubt you complained or ran out the door,s aging that you'd be back later when he was behaving more pleasantly." -> alright, this part slightly confuses me.....i just figured i'd show you for you to see what to do with it

Chapter 25
Haha, I guess that Jenette would have really tried to wriggle out of this
She definitley doesn't mind a challenge
But the fact that it is a social event and all....
*snorts* ready for motherhood.....she's just trying to fool everyone
Hopefully they will see Gena's true self soon enough

Chapter 26
I really cannot believe that Gena said that to Jenette
All over the world babies get born on ranches and they live a fucking happy life there
They grow up loving animals and all the other stuff
If one here was careless it was Gena as she dropped Conor of at such a 'dirty' place
And she just tried to weasel herself out again after the guests all found out the truth
'Inexperienced mother'.....all over the fucking world women are inexperienced when it comes to children
Some women didn't have the chance to take care of nephews or babies of friends so they are even more inexperienced....that was one lame excuse

Chapter 27
Well, looks like they finally gave into their desire
Hopefully oth of them won't regret it on the morning
But they seemed pretty sober and all and I doubt they'll regret anything
Hopefully it won't be too awkward in the morning either

Ps. There were also some mistakes in this chapter.
he was in over his head. -> you should capitalize this word as it's the beginning of a sentence

"We're not," she said. -> unless Jenette is talking to herself, it should be he

he kissed her had, fiercely, possessively. -> again, you should capitalize

"I'm going to tell you what I'm done," he told her as he began to peel her dress away. -> isn't using what I'll be doing better? I don't know, as he wants to show her everything for her not to be clueless anymore....

I really can't wait for more
Hope you update soon :)

Damn! This is getting o good! Loving the update! Please more soon!

Oh my gosh. I held my breath that whole time. It was freaking amazing! I loved it and I really can't wait for more!<3

I can't BELIEVE Gena said that! Such a little...ugh, not even going to say it. But I really want to know what Zacky has to say! Is he going to make her leave, make her stay? Urgh. XD I loved the updates! This is a phenomenal story and I can't wait for more!

Ugh Gena is driving me BONKERS! Though Jennette was right. Our usual style of dealing with such things wouldn't have worked. But unlike her I have a sharp tongue and I know how to use it. It made me laugh how protective Zacky was. And then there was Brian, Johnny and Val! Where's Jimmy and Matt? hahahaha I can't wait for more.

Ugh Gena is driving me BONKERS! Though Jennette was right. Our usual style of dealing with such things wouldn't have worked. But unlike her I have a sharp tongue and I know how to use it. It made me laugh how protective Zacky was. And then there was Brian, Johnny and Val! Where's Jimmy and Matt? hahahaha I can't wait for more.

This I can't wait to see.

This I can't wait to see.

Gena is definitely not a baby person. I suspect there's a motive behind all this. Why would she suddenly want to just settle down like that? Me thinks I smell some thing fishy. Hahaha great chapter.

I seriously love this story. It's a lot different than a lot of stuff on here. Jennette is great, that's saying a lot coming from me. She's a cowgirl which is AMAZING and it's cool to be able to relate to that. Zacky is awesome too. Mind you I'm not a kids person by any means but it's cute the way he is with Coner. Please please PLEASE keep this going!!!!!!! I can't wait for more.

Chapter 19
Well what a night it was
But Bill really deserved that
Shouldn't have talked shit about Jenette and 'leaked' stuff to Gena then
Well, at least Zacky is honest enough to tell her that he wouldn't be ale to stop
He's still a man and has desires
And the fact that he 'warned' her makes him a much better person

Ps. There were two small mistakes in this chapter.
"Rob, I…thank you for the dance,"s he said and stopped dancing. -> you just made a space where it doesn't belong

He obviously couldn't admit that he'd spread tales to GEna that he'd spied on Zacky and Jennette when no one was supposed to know that. -> nothing wild, just that you capitalized the first two letters of her name

Chapter 20
Well, that's not a bad idea to have Jenette help with with searching for a good nanny
I really can't believe that Gena now wants her son back
Cause she wants nothing more than to just use Conor to get more out of Zacky
That's the only reason she's suddenly interested in her son again
And the fact that Gena's old 'friend' Jenette has her son and is around her ex-husband, bothers her
I wonder how that's going to go down in Huntington

Ps. In this chapter there were quite a few more mistakes.
Those last two words seemed toss ay it all. -> i think you wanted to write to say, right?

Won't your ex-wife…won't GEna jump right on that if the person you hire scares Conor or isn't totally perfect? -> again the two first letters capitalized

You need someone who's special, someone who Conor is going to love and who is going to love him right back, soy can't just go rushing in to hire any old person." -> i really don't have any clue what you wanted to say with this

"Before we leave I have something to take care of. in town. -> the end, i don't know if you wanted to have a new sentence or not, either capitalize or put a comma instead of a period/dot, fuck i don't know what to call it

Chapter 21
Haha, I want a unicorn too....always wanted one actucally....or a pegasus....well that was kinda off topic but whatever xD
Well, looks like the time has come to head to Huntington then
I don't think that brining Jenette to social events would be such a good idea
She would get exposed to the media and I really doubt she'd want that
Sure, going out wouldn't be that bad, but if it's social events....
I really can't wait to see what's going to happen in Huntington

Ps. In this chapter was also a mistake. Only a small one though.
he had been so good to her friends, these woman who needed the goodness that had been denied in the past. -> you have to capitalize the beginning here as it's the start of the sentence

I'm sorry that this comment got a bit longer than I had expected. I just hadn't thought you'd update this quickly.
So I had to severak more chapters to comment on =)
I really can't wait for more
Hope you update soon :)

ZOMG!!!! This story is amazing!!
Although I kinda feel bad for Jenette...
Update soon??? Porfavor????

Love the update, cant wait until she gets to huntington and see gena reaction! Most importantly can't wait till the rwlatnship between her and zack go on further! PleAse mOre soon!