I really like this story :] I find it really hard to find any believable oc's in fanfiction but I really like Icenia. Are you going to be doing any other Eragon fanfiction? I need my Murtagh fix lol.
October 9th, 2012 at 07:02am
I just spent 15 or more minutes, typing a comment on here from my phone. I can't express how furious I am. I can't. I'll try to relay everything I remember.
First of all, why on earth do you have Count Dracula and Lucius Malfoy there at the end? It's random and it's creepy.
The spelling errors, of which there were quite a few, were probably just from carelessness. Editing your writing should fix that easily. Language...words from modern times (like "fuck" and "ass") really don't belong in an Eragon fanfic. It simply has no place there and there are an entire host of words that you can use instead. I'm sure you know what I'm talking about.
Now- Icenia. I know that her distinction from the other elves make her unique, and it definitely does, but she seems to have no racial pride of love for her culture, which is very very sad. I hope that will change in the future. My favorite chapter was the fourth, because of the character and relationship development. And lastly, I commend your creativity with the intricacies of the plot at the very beginning. It was a great way to draw me in.
