Fools Rush In - Comments

I think it would have been interesting to actually see some of the party instead of just the aftermath of it. That way readers would be able to get a feel for the characters before all the drama started going down. Like when Anberlin got pregnant, and I didn't feel any worry or sympathy for her, but I feel like I might have if I had gotten a better feel for her character before or gotten attached to her character. I didn't really care much about her worries because I didn't really care more about her. I think the best thing you could do to improve this story is to develop your characters a little bit more.

Okay, I genuinely love the characters you've created... But I personally think it moved too fast.

A few gramatical mistakes, but other wise well written.

Other than those few factors I absoloutely ADORE your story. :)

That's what I call a cliffhanger! Holy crap! I can't wait to see what happens, and what her answer will be. The 2 of them have to be scared out of their minds! Can't wait for the next update! :) I love this story, just so you know!!

Loooooved it <3 This is really getting good. Im excited for more! :)

AHH! God, that was crazy. Declan and Anberlin are crazy! xD
I hope their parents don't kill them xD

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uhm HELLS YES that was a cliff hanger!!!
you evil evil creature you!!!
AHHHHHHHH!!!!
*runs around screaming*

... btw, she should say yes :P

Woohoo! I loved this chapter. Especially the end. I think she should say yes! I hope they get married! That would be exciting! Ahhh now I cant wait.

Sweet proposal! XD
Enough said.

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ahhaha Declan seems so spastic :P
I loves it <3

I liked it a lot. Tis very good excited for more!

Woooo! Update and I see you have comments! Wooooooooooo!
I'm tired and that's why in going wooooooooo!
XD <3

Great and very necessary chapter. Love the story so far, and I would like to give anything you write a shot, because you are just an amazing writer! Just sayin!!!!! <3

hahaha well then :P
I love it so far!
can't wait to see where you take it.

I love this story! Its so great that you were able to take a dream and put it down on 'paper' like this, and sweet enough to share it with all of us. I love how you ended this chapter with Declan fainting! That was hysterical! I couldn't stop laughing at that. Can't wait to see what happens in the upcoming chapters! :)

This is really good. I think its excellent, truly amazing so far. I cant wait to read more.

HAHAHHAHAAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHA! He fainted!!!! WTF?!?! Hahahahahahahahahaha!
One word: priceless
XD <3

hahahaha, the window xD.
Well she's preggers! Dx, There is like a mini Declan/Anberlin in there! xO
What's she gonna tell him!

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>.> <.< I have taken your comment virginity!!!! hahahahahahhahahha!
Whoop whoop! New story! xD
What can I say? xP