Green Grass - Comments

You're summary is anthropological and sociological. And wow. I can't wait to read this.

@ XXXataktoulaXXX
thanks so much for the feedback! I'm glad you're enjoying it :) Unfortunately, I haven't had much time to write and update, in between school and work, but I'm trying to make a bit of progress on this! Thanks!

Hello there. :) Well let's get started, shall we? I was brought here from comment swap and I'm really glad I did. The layout is just perfect and your writing style is superb. You have used your vocabulary pretty well too. I liked the descriptions and the characters you created but a little bit of more dialogue wouldn't kill you. You better finish writing this though because it's pretty good and it would be a shame to leave it unfinished. That's all. XD

Hello there. :) Well let's get started, shall me. I was brought here from comment swap and I'm really glad I did. The layout is just perfect and your writing style is superb. You have used your vocabulary pretty well too. I liked the description and the characters you created but a little bit of more dialogue wouldn't kill you. You better finish writing this though because it's pretty good and it would be a shame to leave it unfinished. That's all. XD

i love the layout, its adorable and simple. i like the way you write, it just seems so flowy? is that the word? i dunno. i like this story. the summary alone made me want to read it. wonderful, keep up the great work

I love: "...the drizzle and mist that clouds the spaces between bony-fingered tree limbs." I love the way you phrased basically everything in this piece. It was beautifully written. You don’t use words that people would normally use to describe things. Your writing comes alive instead of just sitting on the page. I love this story. Keep writing!

Yes! Rachelle is a secret badass, I love it!

I love the different styles you use for the characters' narratives! Update more often, woman!

I like the feel of this. It struck me as wordy, at first, but getting into it was fun and easy, and you had a very good sense of place. I loved the description in what came out of Tommy's mouth and how you didn't use dialogue. Very impressive.

SOUNDS GOOD :)
when's this gonna be up?
(oh and when're you gonna get published? ahah)