We Should Have Left it at Detention - Comments

I just read this whole story in one day....when Zander died I cried so hard. This was such a good story. Love your writing style.

I feel as though at the beginning it was going places but as it progressed it just got more random and confusing. The characters were interesting but I just felt that the story was all over the place without a good transition between each setting/situation

I'm on chapter 46. Thanks sooo much for making me sob before I have to leave for school. I love it, but my friends are gonna be like, so friggin' worried it's not even funny. -_-U

I love this story sooo much. It would be awesome if u made a sequel to it.
Cried a few times, you write it powerfully :)

(:
<3

i just found this today. stayed up all night just to read it.
i absolutely loved it. cried a few times. (:
you should make a sequel. please? :D

Lol. Maybe I want to be hit by a bus!!!!!
Love it.
Can't believe it over!
But
It was good!

but i wish there was more. /: maybe you should make a sequel? (:

awwwhe i loved this story in all. this is one of the best stories ive read on here. good job. (:

It's....OVER?!? -bawls-
I loved this story so, so, so much!

I LOVED IT SO MUCH BUT WHY IS IT OVER D'''''''':

aww no! That was so cute shdghsf :(
..you should make a sequel, ahha (:
<3

*starts bawling*
WHA?DDDDDDD:

D:
Bu-bu-bu-bu-bu-BUT NO. D;

Sequel . . . .
Or i might get an army of people to get on a bus with me to make you get hit by a bus
by US .! :)
Please .?

I really liked your story, but next time maybe don't jump so much into the future. You could have put a lot more into the massive gaps that you created and you would have got a lot more out of the story. The only reason why I didn't like the big gaps was because at the start everything was flowing nicely, but by the end it was really choppy and it just didn't feel finished.
xx

I love it *sniffle* So sweet. I liked the hickey part :) Oh and about Dawn and Dusk it makes me sad I like that story. I liked the first one better but I was starting to like the second one too. But I'm happy Ian and Kevin are happy :)

Sequel? :(

watt? it's over..?? noooo.... )': i love kevin!!! )':

it was an awesome story though, i loved every word of it(:

sequel? lol or just a spin-off story from zander's and sparrow's pov??

That was a perfect end :) I loved this story so much, thank you for writing it <3

I think he died of a random attack of the Bubonic Plague :D
It really was a great story through all the ups and downs and hating Ian's guts a bit :) the only way I can really say to improve is maybe not dragging things out over too many chapters like 28-30 was one event I felt could have been a little more consolidated. Just a suggestion ^-^ but your writing consistently gets even better, so that shows you've grown.
The ending chapter was a perfect ending. It tied things up nicely where it felt open but not too open, if you know what I mean