Us Against The World - Comments

I love this story, it is amazing. I like have become obsessed with these characters and I feel so sorry for Eva, not only was she raped, she's now most likely pregnant. :'(

I found this yesterday and just finished reading what you have posted.

I was absolutely hooked with the introduction, and the writing is fabulous. A few things I noticed though:

When someone is being addresses, they're separated by commas. "What's up with you[,] Bob?" < I didn't notice this mistake much, but I think it was in there once or twice.

Also, when someone speaks it should be, "I can't believe you[,]" [she] said. There's usually a comma when the quote ends, and the speaker is usually lower case (unless they're a proper noun).

That's all the grammar things that stuck out to me. I thought this was fantastic, though, and I can't wait for an update! Great job!

I just found this story today, and it is amazing. I just read through all the chapters in record time. This story is just so, so, so great. I love how you give the readers a picture of the story; you're not rushing into their relationship. I really love this story- so much. Please update soon. :)

Hi! I just wanted to say how much I like your story :) I stumbled upon it yesterday and couldn't stop reading! Can't wait to see it updated again!

Thanks for the shout out! Anyway I had guessed what happened to Eva before she told Cyrus. I wasn't expecting what Cyrus told her though. You are an amazing writer!!!

Oh my god.
Just got caught up.
I can't believe Eva was attacked.
This is such a great story in the way that nothing ever happens the way I think it will.
All the same, I feel so bad that Eva was raped. It was just one of those things that I never thought would happen. And the fact that you don't go into detail about it is brilliant. The imagination of a person always thinks up the worst of what could have happened. I bet Cyrus is blaming himself partially. While he was having dinner with Jennifer, his friend's adoptive daughter and someone who he's grown to care about suffered through a traumatic experience.
I can't wait to see what happens next with Eva. I can't imagine that it's anything good even though that's what I'm hoping for.

Oh my god. This chapter is incredible. I've read stories before that include topics like this, but they never wrote about it in the same way that you have done. This made me cry a little. I've never written a comment like this before, and maybe I'm just really emotional today, but I almost forgot that I was reading a fictional story. I honestly can't explain how well you've written this chapter. It's heartbreaking, yet beautiful. I can't wait for more!

Oh no a cliffy... ugh! Cyrus is such a dork lol. Please update soon!

i really like this story, and normally im that type of douche that just reads the story but doesnt comment, but i would really appreciate it if you kept on writing cause this is areallycoolstoryandidontknowwhattosaysoimjustnotputtingspaceswhichfeelsereallyweirdbutyoushouldtottallypostmorechaptersandilltottallycommentmoreandmaybeactuallyfigureoutwhattosaybutttttyaaaaaaaa.im really akward. srry.

I love nice Cyrus! Please update ASAP! I can't wait to see them get closer!!!!!

That chapter was so touching.
I didn't think it would turn out the way it did after Eva kind of yelled at Cyrus.
And I certainly didn't think that Cyrus would open up to her like that.
They're friends. :)

Aw, I love those two. :')

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Oh my god. This is so heartbreaking. Why? Why would he say that? Damn him. Damn that lovely Cyrus.

Really good so far :) x

Cyrus needs to be nice or be rude! All this switching is giving me whiplash! I agree that his behavior was strange when he answered those questions. Great chapter! Can't wait for the next update! :)

Stupid phone cut me off. :/
That was an interesting reaction from Cyrus when Jennifer asked him about Eva.
And what's even more interesting was the way Jennifer posed the question. It's like, I don't know, funny.
I love this story so much and just when I think things are going to take a turn, Cyrus ends up taking three steps back. He's nice for all of five minutes and then he's back to being somewhat of a jerk.
Can't wait for the next update. :)

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This story is absolutely amazing! I love it! Plzzz update asap!!!

Oh god, I can't even explain how brilliant this is. It's hilarious, and so lovely. More. I want more. Please? :3