One of the Boys - Comments

Here from comment swap! I really like your writing. Everything seems to be really well structured. I laughed at the part where the characters explains she doesn't get along with other girls. I just kept thinking of myself with that lol. I really like the character so far and you kept me wanting to continue reading through the whole first chapter. I haven't read the rest but I plan to. Also, thank you for not having a difficult to read layout. my eyes are going to bleed out from all the white on black today lol. keep up the good work.

I know you have not updated in years but i would love it you would update please!!!

Wow! The first chapter already has packed a punch – pardon the pun, knowing what happened at the end there with Miller – and I’m really interested in reading more! Your descriptions are crystal clear without being overbearing, and I could picture everything happening right then and there. The exposition explained plenty without dumping it all on the reader at once, which was also great, and right off the bat, Lucy is fleshed out and a great narrator. Keep up the great work! :)

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This isn't a story I'd normally read but I found myself actually liking it a little. Its well written. With cool characters. And has a decent plot. Keep up the good work! Update soon!

Very cool story. Can't wait for more.

please update!!!! everyone whos commented loves it and wants it back! it was my favorite

I love it so much. Second time reading :)

can u update this is an amazing story, finished it all in a day!

WHERE ARE YOU??? please update

Where are you?!?!

Just re-read this.. you should really write more (:
I like this quite a lot :D

LOVE the new layout! It is so classy and chic, I just had to stare at it for awhile when I got to the update. I really like the colors and designs, wonderful job!

And equally as brilliant was the new chapter! I can't wait to see what happens next with Leo and the whole Skylar-mentor thing and with Knigston! So many questions itching to be answered!

Omg Whats Going To Happen

Was quite excited when I saw you had updated (:
Love it, and really can't wait for the next chapter.

I was so sad when i thought you werent writing anymore. Then out of the blue you updated! yay!
I really liked this chapter and cant wait till the next one! I legit only come on Mibba to read like two stories, one of which is this one. c:

I'm happy you finally updated! and a long one too!

The first thing I must say is that the layout is a bit hard on the eyes. The words are hidden in the margin and the colors aren't the best to read on. Another thing, girls going to an all-boys boarding school are completely unlikely, so its unrealistic and a bit cliched. The fact that her own father would make her dress as a male and pretend to be one just to get an education seems unlikely as well. However, I did like the introduction, its pulled me in with the premise of a love scene between these two characters but I would read through it and check your grammar. Also, some things are a little redundant. You don't need to say each article of clothing that's on the floor, you can just say uniform on the floor. It takes away from the flow of the story.

On here doing a comment swap, and I don't have time to read the whole thing, but it seems very interesting, I like the idea of the intro revealing a latter of the story. Your grammar and spelling is wonderful I the first few chapters I read and skim through it was superb.

Well, comment swap brought me here. And I have to say, this story reminds me a lot of She's The Man or whatever that movie is called when Amanda Bynes pretends to be a boy to be on some soccer team or something. I feel like the layout could be a bit better. Good luck! xo

Woohoo! (: More hehe this is amazing.