One of the Boys - Comments

I kinda feel bad for Lucy, Cameron seems so open to her and so friendly and she really can't be the same way beause she has this huge secret looming over her. I can't comprehend how she manages not to just tell her secret to Cameron, I would be so tempted to if I were in her shoes. I wonder how he'd react if/when he finds out? He seems like such a sweet guy...

As for Leo(<3), he is such a smooth-talking type of guy. It's like he can talk his way out of anything and part of me wonders if Leo already knows Lucy isn't really a boy? He just seems like the type of guy who would keep that type of knowledge to himself for future blackmail uses or just to see how things progress?

And I wonder if Marcus is going to try anything with Lucy? I like how he was protective of her in the club when he pulled her away from Cameron after she started flirting with him. I like those moments where he goes from teasing to serious :)

Anyways! Update soon please! I can't even express how excited I was to see an update for this story <3

Those guys are so fun! I love cameron especially(: Leo... I'm not yet sure what to think of him & Lucy/Lucas is great! She's strong and fierce and completely adorable. The characters you have are fantastic, and the plot, though overdone, you've managed to keep it new and entertaining. There's nothing more frusturating then seeing a story you love get butchered by terrible grammar, spellig, and just writing in general. Thanks for saving me from the frusturation.
Update soon please(:
-Eli

Another thing is I like that you made Lucy strong and not a Damsel in Distress type character. I agree that guys fearing her is unrealistic, but I don't think she's a Mary Sue because of it because her personality isn't perfect. So I guess part of her is Mary Sueish, but I don't think she's really a Mary Sue. Please make sure she stays that way.

I love your characters, especially Eric, Marcus, and Teddy but Lucy seems kind of like a Mary Sue. Mary Sues generally seem to obnoxiously upstage every character in the story as Lucy has some how made half of the men, including the buff athletic types, at her school fear her and not try to show her up. That's not how boys work. If some like Lucy really went to an all boys school and tried to show them up, she would end up beaten up in the parking lot and not stand a chance. It's unreal that she's oh so strong and yet cute and petite and makes all the straight guys uncomfortable at the same time as having them fear her. In real life, they wouldn't take Lucas seriously. She seems unrealistically perfect, you think a guy would put up with someone so small showing them up and yet still feel attracted to them? I don't. Other than that, your characters are okay and your story line is great. I have subscribed a while ago but your story had so much potential and you could've doom better.

I love how rude Cameron was without knowing it.

I think Lucy is a pretty cool character. It kinda annoyed me how childish she acted with Max, but it made her more human and likable. My favorite guy character is Leo and Marcus. Leo is complex and Lucy and Marcus are comedy gold. I feel Cameron is a bit of a Mary Sue and I don't really find him that interesting as some of the others. Teddy is cool because I'd never expected him to be the way he is. The others I can't really judge because they haven't been in the story long enough. But it's a good story and I really enjoy it. Update whenever you can and I hope you're proud of this story because it's really great. That's about it; can't wait to see what you do next.

This is starting to get suspenful, i like it.

I feel so bad for Lucy =/ Is Cam the boy she was with in the very beginning? I hope so ;) She's strong for not spilling her secret, but I guess she's gotta keep it cause it's her dad's position in trouble :( What on earth is up with leo?? And is Eric secretly gay?? Is that why he's upset? i dont get why he's upset =/

Oh dear god, Cameron! The poor boy!

I love this story. It has a unique taste to it. Once I started reading it I was hooked. The only thing I would comment on would be the minor spelling errors buts nothing to really worry about. Cant wait till your next update! (:

Holy crap! Poor Cameron!! That George is sick sick sick!

I love Leo!!! :D His character is so unique and mysterious. I honestly have no clue what he is going to do next and that unpredictability keeps me yearning for updates!

I can't wait for Monday!

I love love love love LOVE this story! <3<3<3

I love it when you update. Its awesome. I'm glad she beat the crap out of George. He deserved more though. Can't wait to read more. Update soon!!!!

I love it and I can't wait till Monday!

new reader, and i LOVE this story!!!! <3

Love the story.

Love this story!!!! Unique plot!!!

UPDATEEEE!

I'm kind of scared about what George and Lucy are going to do...
George seems like a total creep.
Plus... How is Lucy going to switch phones with him without getting too "intimate?"
Hmm... I really want to know what happened between Cameron and this George guy though. It just seems like something really bad went on... Especially considering how George is acting.
I'm scared for Lucy...
Please tell me nothing bad happens!! Please?!?!
I also love how Lucy was practically flirting with Leo... She needs to stop drinking. Aye yi yi...
Thanks lots for the update! This story rocks my socks. :)

RAPE! George just screams rape! You seriously can't leave us hanging! Update?! :D