Flicker and Snaps - Comments

For the comment swap.
I'll be reading chapter 1

Reading through the first chapter, I did notice one small grammar error. When you saw the name of a city/town and out the State after it, you should always put a comma after the city/town name. For example, when you were talking about the character's drive from Chicago to Taytum, there should have been a comma after both Chicago and Taytum since you said the State after it. If you don't put the State after the name, then you don't need a comma after the city/town name. I hope that made sense. ^^' I know it's a little thing, but it's just something I noticed. c:

Aside from that, your grammar and writing in general is very excellent. You seem to have a lot of skill at it and a whole lot of potential. The chapter was very good, though a bit long for my tastes. But that's just my personal preference since I'm easily distracted and have trouble sitting through a long chapter in one sitting. Can I also think it's great that you did so much research for your character, that really shows your devotion as a writer.

Very well done on the story. It was a good read and your story has a whole lot of potential.

I instantly connected to your main character, well apart from Aspergers Syndrome. I love the idea behind this story, and the lay out is brilliant. There are minimal to no grammar or spelling errors in your story. You just need to watch out for run-on sentences and other than that this is perfection.

This is a very good story! I like how you researched stuff, I know I don't have the patience for that. I noticed one little mistake but it's no big deal. I really like how you describe stuff, and the facts you mention are very interesting!
The only thing I'm not fond of is the length of some of your chapters. I mean some people like long chapters but others are slightly intimidated by them. I kind of have attention issues so it's hard for me to read long chapters. But this is just me being picky! It's still a good story
Keep it up!

I like your story! The only thing I would recommend is a little proof reading, theres some grammar and spelling mistakes throughout your chapters. Also I would suggest you don't increase the font throughout the chapter, although you could continue to make things bolded. Nice story!

At least you totally got caught up ROFL.

The question is, is it a What-or-a-Who?

Omigosh... I got the shiveries!!! You made me scared, Abi!!! D:< Stop writing so good!! Now I'm all freaked out!!! What the devil touched her?!

It was not that bad! If I was Gage I would have kicked her butt though.... He is not really exploding as much as gushing XD

Cicil's a butt. He shouldn't have exploded at her like that! It was an accident!

:) Thanks :)

i like where this is going :) cicil is so cute bless him xD I SAW MY LINE I HELPED YOU WITH!made me giggle XD yay... can't wait for more as usual

:) *smiles* :)

Aww you don't need my help, doll. You can do it :)

XD I hope so, if I have your support I think this could work out :)

:3 I like it.