Distorted - Comments

Chapter Seventeen

All these chapters you write are so intense, yet, amazing. There was so much tension in this chapter I felt like I could cut the air with a butter knife, aha. I'm curious to read more. c:

Chapter Eighteen

The interaction between the two love birds kind of reminds me of the two main characters from the Wake trilogy. It's the feeling I've been trying to place all story long, aha. This really is amazing. Hopefully, you update soon. :)

And now, I'm all caught up. <33 :)

The plot thickens O_O

Chapter Ten

then slid around my waist,

Slide*

I get the feeling that since he was mentioned in this chapter, and a few other times, that her father is going to be a major character in this? Maybe that, or I'm just crazy, aha.

Chapter Eleven

I froze, realizing that I just slipped up.

I'd*

It might just be me - you know, the way I'm reading - but your tenses seem to kind of bounce a little. Re-check?

I laughed at him and followed the woman inside.

This line just to me, seems out of character. A simple, little thing like that makes her laugh after all the stress that's been placed on her, and all the fear she felt about going into the office before? Maybe I'm just being too picky.

I like the new doctor, but after the way you ended this chapter, I'm more curious about the old one.

Chapter Twelve

I blindly reached for my phone, taking it from her hand and leaving her office.

The flow of this line is choppy. There's a little tense flux and a grammar mistake. <3

This was yet another lovely, yet intense, chapter. <3

Chapter Thirteen

Nice chapter. I'm curious about this new character you went and added. The way he answered her question made my stomach crawl. I don't trust this Jude kid.

Chapter Fourteen

Christian's point of view. :) Hooray.

spike of jealous that stabbed

jealousy*

I kind of don't like how Kendall is leading Christian on. I mean, she kisses him, and such, leading him on, then right when she's fine, or doesn't need someone to depend on, she's alright and points out that they aren't together. Maybe it's just me, being picky, but that actually kind of sucks, aha.

I frowned, realizing he was right.

she*

I'm glad they're going out, now. It makes me feel better about the whole leading on thing situation, aha. <3

The way you ended this chapter gave me chill bumps. Can't wait for the next. <3

Chapter Sixteen

That was so sweet, yet, so scary. I like that Christain will always be there for Kendall, though. <33 It's very reassuring.

I'm almost all caught up. :)

Chapter Five

I like how understanding that doctor guy is, and also how heroic Christain is. They're both awesome people, and even though Kendall doesn't much favor one, I hope they both stay in her life. <33

Chapter Six

It took me a minute to gather that this was in someone else's point of view? I'm sincerely wondering what's going on with Kendall. Who was the girl? What did she do? Was the girl ever there? This is a very intense chapter.

Chapter Seven

Okeydokey, now we're back to Kendall's point of view. c: Aww, she lost the doctor guy. Just when I had so much hope for him. That dream was intense. I'm glad she has a friend as good as Christian.

Chapter Eight

This chapter was kind of sweet and cute, albeit the bit about her mom bascially being a junkie. All of these chapters are pretty simple, you know? To the point and then bam, to the next. A little fluff is nice. I wonder alot more about the two's - Kendal and Christian's history together.

Chapter Nine

That's really sweet of him. Christian, I mean. He's a good guy. I feel so awful about his mom, however. It breaks my heart. Regardless, I love the fact that Kendall has someone like him in her life. <3

Chapter 14:
That chapter in Christan's P.O.V. was pretty ace.

Chapter 15:
“I told you I was going to help you,” he said softly, gazing at me.
Got all warm & fuzzy. It's been a long time since reading has made me feel that way.

Chapter 16:
OMG. OMG. OMG.

Chapter 17:
Good, but short. : )

Update!

this is great :)

I feel like I should just sit here and wait for the next chapter :D This was great, and I'm super curious about what the therapist has got to say, Can I just say though...

Her evil twin did it?!

Well crap! Kendall just can't catch a break, can she? And poor murdered Cassie :(
Either way, awesome chapter :D

More awe-ness! I was a little worried when Christian pulled the car over but, he seems like a good guy. I'm wonder who or what kendall dreamed about this time since it woke her up screaming. Anyway, christian and kendall or very cute together. :)

Christian's awesome :D I'm just getting more and more into this story, update soon? :D

Yay Kendall and Christian are getting together!

However, Christian seriously needs to take a chill pill. Even though they'll be dating now, he should still probably back off a little with the jealousy/protectiveness. I still don't like Jude very much, he seems jerk-ish.

The eyes... I'm getting a possible bad vibe again.... I'm thinking they belong to Jude or some new character that isn't a good guy. Anyway, good job with the update.

Awwww, Christian's jealous :D I'm assuming it was Jude's number on the paper...? Or...'I KNOW YOUR SECRET'

I knew the trip to see her new doctor probably wouldn't end well. Also, this Jude guy? Not sure what to think of him, I"m kid've getting a bad/he knows something feeling... Oh well, jsut have to wait and see, right? :)

Good job, I'm always excited when there's an update!

Love this psychological thriller.
Keep it up.

Thanks a ton for informing me on the update! Who is Jude? He sounds like a bad guy to me. Hmph. Update soon!

Jude kinda gives me the creeps, and he hasn't even been around very long O_O
Great chapter!

Ahh! Yay that was awesome, really wasn't expecting it. Poor Mr. Monroe

Update when you can!

He's dead?! Seriously? Holy crap...
Update soon, the suspense is back!

Holy F#@&, what happened to Dr. Monroe?! It has to do with her dream, right? LOL. Update soon.