I like all the contestants - so far. What I don't understand is why some of them are talking about psychotic girls when there hasn't actually been one yet. Not to be offensive or anything. Just askin'
commenting twice in less than 15 minutes :') I thought this chapter was really awesome, and in some way i already feel that the characters who have been named already are really relatable and i cant wait to see where you all take each of them :)
commenting twice in less than 15 minutes :') I thought this chapter was really awesome, and in some way i already feel that the characters who have been named already are really relatable and i cant wait to see where you all take each of them :)
First off, I have to say that my expectations for this are really, really high. Honestly, it's yet another band story, but I really, really think you both can do an amazing job on this. Like, there's so much potential here and it's amazing, and I believe that you'll go above and beyond. I believe that this story will be absolutely stellar. <3 :)
I really, really adored the layout. It was kind of matchy, and kind of not, what with that white layout on the side. But that pretty strip added to the elegance of the design and took attention away from all that purple which was nice. It's a very balanced layout and yet, still beautiful in its simplicity. Nice job. C:
The summary was really kind of interesting. It was somewhat short and simple, which I liked. Most people have these huge summaries that just drag on and on and don't give me any info about the story. But not yours. Yours just gave me the basics, some sure footing on which to begin my "reading adventure" and sent me on my way. I liked that and I'm amped for this story. (:
Chapter One
The idea of a game show is in all honesty pretty unique. I've seen a lot of band stories, but none with the same idea as this. I admit, I've seen shows on television like this, but never stories. Coupled witht that knowledege, and the fact that I've seen you're both amazing writers, I'm interested on how everything is going to turn out. I wouldn't go as far as to say love, since this is only the beginning, but I do like this. I like it alot. :)
or my breathe
breath*
That's the only spelling/grammar mistake I noticed. Breathe = doing the action. Like, "Make sure to breathe properly after excirsing." Breath - is an intake of air. Like, "I got the breath knocked out of me." I'm pretty sure you know the difference, but it makes me feel a little more secure to explain, just in case. It's a really common mistake, so no worries.
But really, that was an amazing little first chapter! (: It pulled me in what with the lovely detail and the cute idea and just everything. I like the idea the he's so concious of all these things, yet, he's still determined to find a nice, civilized woman to be his. I think this will be an adorably romantic - if not awesomely - dramatic story. I cannot wait to read more. :) <33
it seems to me that Evan and Alex are alike in more ways than one ;') and that they are going to buttheads but then get along really well? Just a guess ;] i cant wait to read more :o
This was short, but reeeal sweet :') You portrayed him in such an unusual light, its pretty much always the same, him being a man whore or whatever, but those first few lines that you wrote just made me smile at how different this story is going to be xD I cant wait to read on so hurry ;]
It's caught my interest:)
My favorite..so far..is probably Holly