Forever Praying - Comments

Aye where the rest at??!

I liked how detailed it was. In the middle of the story it reminded me of the story Cinderella.

This is the best fanfiction I have read in a long time :)

You never fail to add detail about the surroundings and actions even though it's a fanfiction. It's cheesy, cute and breath-taking, I love it!

Fantastic job on portraying Caspian :)

:x i forgot about my subs to stories. eek. erm, i don't remember where i am in this story. i'll just read.

OKAYSOCHAPTERTHREE.

I love her protective her father is of her. it's sweet.

I feel like sometimes you're faltering in and out of a professional composure, when it comes to her, since she IS a princess.

This whole thing, the whole wanting to meet Prince Caspian thing, it had all started when she was an infant.

like that, for example, it just sounds so unprofessional and unpolished. :x

and how do you pronounce her name? o.o

yay prince caspian!! woot! haha. i found a few grammatical errors but, i liked this. write more >.>

This is such a nice story
I love the layout
and how you write and how you are very descriptive when you write :)
I read all 5 chapters and I really like it and you have a new subscriber
(for the comment swap would you read *She Quenched my Thirst*
Thanks :D

I love your layout. (:

Though there are problems with grammar in this story, and the dialogue is a bit awkward in structure, I think you did very well. I like your subject choice and how you made it all play out. I think you should work on using proper grammar, however. It'll better the reader's experience, and your overall writing technique.

It's just that the plot can't be everything. You need the grammar and the strong skin and bones to pull it all together. You've got some bones, you just need more skin and calcium. I sound like a fool talking about bones and skin and calcium, but the comparison is what I like to use. Heh. (:

I'd be willing to beta your work, if you'd like.
You can PM me if you want.
I'm sorry if I was a bit rude, I only want to help.

I read it all it's such a good story
Check out my storys Murder can be Graceful and RIP Max thx

I read it all it's such a good story
Check out my storys Murder can be Graceful and RIP Max thx

I read it all it's such a good story
Check out my storys Murder can be Graceful and RIP Max thx

I read it all it's such a good story
Check out my storys Murder can be Graceful and RIP Max thx

I read it all it's such a good story
Check out my storys Murder can be Graceful and RIP Max thx

Bullshit. Why the hell do you not have more comments? Gurl, I wanna hit someone now. But I won't (:

The layout is...pink xD I admit, I don't adore the color pink but I do like the light pink background. It's the darker pink that bothers me >.> But that's just me. I mean, its still a beautiful layout and I could easily read it, so...I have no further comments on the pink :D

And the banner is purtiful.

You know, I'd prefer maybe Peter than Caspian because Caspian is too hairy. He seems like one of those guys with the flippy hair he'd have to constantly flip to the side to keep it out of his eyes. Get what I'm saying? ;D

But this really is an amazing story THAT DESERVES MORE FUCKING COMMENTS. <3

Yeah, I only read the prologue but I already like Candide(sp? :o) character. But that's basing it off of what Caspian said xD

Why is he leaving? :o Is he fighting in war? Is he doing something stupid(that almost all the characters fucking do)? Maybe its in the genes.

But I'm going to continue reading to find answers ;D

I stand by what I said before about the layout. Just love it.

I'm a fan-girl when it comes to Caspian. So when he showed I did some weird war cry thing. X)

I love how, despite the danger, she went to try to save the faun. It shows a great thing in her. And it could also be played as a weakness, if you so choose so.
I really liked it.

Another beautifully written chapter. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Your story, thus far, is quite gentle and sweet. A definite change in pace for me, seeing as I tend towards the uncomfortable side of writing / reading. It flows very well and fits the mood of me sitting out here on the balcony of my home under my umbrella. It feels quite calming, actually.

I haven't ever seen this film, or what have you, and so for me I can read it entirely as if it's all your own idea; which is fantastic! The only reason I know it's not entirely original is because of Ben Barnes, but that aside it has its own flair of originality and that is something to be admired. Great job!

She didn’t have time to question this though, because the young princess was carried off into her dream world. I really love that line.
So I really like the layout. It kind of matches it. I really love that she's always wanted to meet the Prince. But you didn't make it seem like it was a fan-girl type thing. More of an admiring thing.
Your imagery is great and your words flow together really well.

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I love this!

Okay, first of all, your writing is wonderful. It flows so well and you have little to no errors at all which I found quite impressive.

Secondly, who doesn't love Ben Barnes? Any Prince Caspian story is bound to be great. With that said, this seems to be extremely original and I like the fact that you could read it as original fiction also. Not many stories are like that.

The banner and layout are gorgeous! I love them.

I will definately be reading this as you update. *subscribe*

I love the idea of a princess in those medevial(sp?) times. At first I didn't get the part that she was in Narnia. But I like that idea, too. When I found out it was in Narnia I remembered who Prince Caspian is, haha. You are a terrific writer, darlin'. I found absolutely no errors of any sort in these chapters. I cannot wait to see what happens next...if you see you have another subscriber that'll be me...;)

You have me hooked. I can't wait for more!

<3

P.S I love your banner and layout!

First I gotta say I love your layout and banner picture

When reading this story
I just feel in love with it
I adore your prologue, not too long or too short and just the right amount and right amount of description.
I also love how you have Prince Caspian in this
I totally love him <3

I can't stop reading this story
I love how you wrote this entire thing, from the detail to the dialogue
I can't wait to see what is next and how it ends
I'm gonna subsribe to this

Keep up the good work <3

Wow, the prologue was really good. It made my heart ache and it was... amazing.

The first chapter was really good. I can't wait until you update this, I'm subscribing.