Finally getting around to commenting again, as I promised!
This is a very sexy story, aha! I love all the outfit details; Gloria (and you obviously) have very good taste. I like Gloria for a few other reasons than her style though. Its like, she's around all these hot football players, but is able to keep her head on and not get all flustered and carried away. She's sophisticated and classy. I really like how you've developed her as a character.
I also like that you include the culture of Spain in this story, mentioning things distinct to that country. It makes the story that much more believable.
The only thing I want to point out is just what I pointed out before: to break up the dialogue and sections of description. A lot of it is clumped into one long paragraph and it gets a little confusing sometimes. That's all though! :) xx
I've just had two sport fics in a row, aha. I'm not good with sport stories. Anyway, this is well written. The only thing I would suggest is to break up the dialogue, so its not all clumped into one paragraph. Other than that, I think you have an interesting plot development and characters. I liked the little retro touch to it in the second chapter; I always tend to associate sports with boys, which is why I'm wary of reading sport fics, but this one is good :) it has girly touches to it, haha. Also, the art stuff, like her photography. So I can relate to Gloria in some way.