I like this alot i feel like it could really grow into something. A little tip. Some of your paragraphs are huge and seem to go on and on. Yeah i know paragraphs can be long but sometimes it starts to get to some readers and they skim which leads to losing them.
I honestly cannot manage going through that. It's got to be the hardest thing ever and I have to say, never going through it but seeing it in movies and on TV (i know it's not the same), you make it very realistic. Keep it up! I can't wait for more
I cried a lot, I will never understand how truly hard that must be for anyone... Jayden has strong people to support her, especially Jordan I am glad he is there for her! can't wait for more, Love it <3
that poor girl :( I am glad she has Jordan there and her family to help her through it, it isn't going to be easy :( love it <3 cannot wait for more :)
I gotta say her parents took that well, all thinngs concidering. She's a very lucky girl to have all those people around her that love her. Keep up the amazing work. Can't wait for more. I reall am liking this story
That was so depressing, but I have a string feeling she'll get through everything. Especially with the team by her side...and Jordan lol. Great job and keep it up. I really can't wait for more
YAY! I am SO SO SO Happy you updated this! stick with it girl, its amazing! great update. im glad you brought in some jordan/jayden history to clear things up. this story is so emotional! i love it! update again soon! :)