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  • This.Useless.Heart.

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    This is quite nice. They're so cute and sweet together. :)
    Don't be so hard on yourself. I think both chapters are well-written and make plenty of sense.
    The only thing I would reccomend is another quick readthrough/proofread of it, particularly the first chapter where I found minor errors:
    “I refuse to answer you’re sexually charged notes... -"you're" should be "your"
    I smiled to myself, knowing that’s whatone dayOliver and I should become - you missed the spaces between "what" and "one" and "day" and "Oliver", also in my opinion this sentence reads awkwardly. I would reccommend something like "...knowing that's what Oliver and I should become one day."
    Yeah, well, anyway. Keep up the good work. :)
    September 18th, 2011 at 08:35pm
  • vices

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    erm...
    I really don' understand...
    HOW CAN THEY BE SO CUTE ASDFGHJKL(:
    ohmygoodness, I absolutely love this story.
    it seems like every time I reread, they get even cuter, if possible!
    PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE, please update(:
    I'VE SUBSCRIBED, DEAR<3
    June 26th, 2011 at 09:15am
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    erm...
    I really don' understand...
    HOW CAN THEY BE SO CUTE ASDFGHJKL(:
    ohmygoodness, I absolutely love this story.
    it seems like every time I reread, they get even cuter, if possible!
    PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE, please update(:
    I'VE SUBSCRIBED, DEAR<3
    June 26th, 2011 at 09:15am
  • visions_of_blasphemy

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    This is just as adorable as the first story was. I think that they should have kids :). And I like how, though this is slash, there's a clearly defined male/female type partnership, with Liam playing more of the woman's role. He's more sensitive, he wants the kids. It's cute. And you can tell that you edited this a lot, because there are significantly less grammar and spelling mistakes. Update?
    June 26th, 2011 at 04:54am
  • anders.

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    -wrinkles nose-
    No kids? Yes, yes you do need them Liam >.>

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    You're handicapped all of a sudden? What happened? :x
    May 29th, 2011 at 05:26am
  • Artistique

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    Jamesy this just made my day
    Oliver and Liam are so adorable together. They seriously make me smile. :)
    May 23rd, 2011 at 01:35am
  • I'd.Be.Your.Tears

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    aww :) they're so cute!
    im glad this is finally out, im looking forward to reading it!! update soon please! :D
    May 23rd, 2011 at 01:29am
  • anders.

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    -waswaitingforthisforweeks-

    Is there mpreg?
    Those weird me out.
    But they're really adorable at the same time.
    Or maybe I should reread the summary. >.>
    Righto.
    Anyways.
    Awe. They're marrieddddddddd :3333
    <3
    May 22nd, 2011 at 10:52pm
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