Lust for Blood - Comments

Ewwie Lockhart xD
Great chapter ;D
She lust for men's blood? XD
Update soon, sweets :) <33

The fragments in the summary kind of threw me off a little, but it successfully made me want to know what was going on.

I like the banner and the general red scheme of the layout. It's very fitting for a vampire story. The white rose at the bottom is very cute also (:

I love the fact that it's got a Harry Potter element to it. I've never read a story with a vampire at Hogwarts, so it's very original and interesting. I'm glad that you kept Hermione and Dumbledore canon correct (so many people don't), and I think it's going to be interesting to see your own main character, Meira, develop and how she fits into the general scheme of things at Hogwarts.

It's a wonderful start so far(:

DUMBELDORE IS IN THIS. I LOVE IT ALREADY.

pardon my flail.

Anyway, this is such an interesting concept, one I've never seen before. I normally don't like stories that are written in the first person, but you have succeded in pulling together a mangnificent story written in first person POV. This is just so beautifully written. You really sucked me into this story, so I am definitely subscribing!

I absolutely love this story so far <3 You are definitely a talented writer darling :)

I loved the layout :) I think it works here.

I am looking forward to reading more :) I didn't see any mistakes or anything, and I can get a feel for the main character. She seems so unsure and nervous because she is like all of them, but at the same time, not so much. Keep up the amazing work, and I look forward to reading some more :)

So I'm going to read and comment at the same time so bare with me....
Love the layout!
A good summary as well, it makes me want to read on.
'most of them were very old and the spine was slowly eroding away.' Should be changed to spines... Great description though.

'huge tradition Victorian chair' traditional*

'I shown respect to those who respected me' I show respect to those who respect me*

The descriptions you give to the characters are maybe a little to full on for the start of the story, some times its a good thing to pace them out.

half with and half vampire! thats awesome, I can see now why you went into such detail.

'In front of us behind his wide dark desk sat Dumbledore.' 'In front of us, behind*

'Albus smiled towards my mother and father,' there should be a full stop.

'of his personality well,' another full stop.

'dear?” Albus asked,' another full stop.

Hogwarts,” Dumbledore smiled,' another full stop.

'hide the worry with a smile,' another full stop.

'the Professor didn’t know what to reply,' the professor didn't know how* to reply.

' Professor McGonagall smiled and shown me towards the door.' read this over, it sounds a little confusing.

Subbing, this idea is very original and I love Harry Potter, what a great spin to put on it! can't wait to read more

Okay, this is a brillant idea! :)
I really enjoyed this story!
May I say something: you could (you don't have to) add some spaces to seperate (sorry I'm a horrible speller) the paragraphs. (You did do that but some of them you didn't) I didn't see any grammar or spelling errors.
The whole layout is really cool but my favorite thing is the flower at the end of the chapter and summary. :) Great job! :D

First off, I really like the layout. The banner at the top goes really well I think. To me, the background did go well with the banner and everything.
I really liked the detail you put into this, how well it flowed together and how good the beginning was. And how you ended it was really good as well. I think it was quite an awesome way to end it.
And the flower at the bottom of the page I think suits it. :P
I thought this was really good. good job with it, I can see you doing well with this! :)

This was interesting. I especially loved how it was HARRY POTTER(HE ROCKS MY SOCKS) alright...maybe not him as in the character but the books are great.

Anyway:

Layout: I love all of it. But together, I don't think it matches. Maybe Changing the lettering to purple? or making the backround a red instead of lavender? other than that, I loved it.

Story: It was quite detailed and had a great beginning, the ending was awesome, I especially loved the last sentence and that flower! So pretty.

Make sure you put spaces between paragraphs. I saw multiple paragraphs together when they should have been separated, unless you meant to do that?

Either way: Great job!

As the comment above already states, I love the layout :)
Okay so first off, I had to really dichiper your story because my computer won't let me see commas, apostraphes, and the like but it's not not worthy. I didn't catch any grammar errors and I really loved the ending :) Suspenseful :)

Gonna take your comment virginity ;D
I love the layout <333
I really like where this is going :)
So I'm gonna subscribe <3