First things first, I apologize for the delay in reading your story. This story sounds very promising and im glad its not like the everyday cliche story of love. The point is made and not sugarcoated at all. Although the converse and skinny jeans are a bit cliche the structure and details make up for it. Your vocabulary is amazingly sophisticated which makes the story more enjoyable for me to read. Clones, we all had/had them at schools but having most of the girls looking like one is definitely differently. At least to me it is. I hope this story doesn't end up being like all of the others because it's off to a good start. I didn't find any grammar errors which is nice too, they're a pet peeve of mine. Well done so far.
June 19th, 2011 at 11:11am