Yay, this chapter is finally here! I love it! The description is fantastic, I'm watching this movie in my head and I am positive that you could publish this book if you decided to. I don't know much about court/custody battles either, but if you were interested in making it more realistic, I would suggest researching court cases.
Yay, they seemed so happy and cute in that scene, I could totally see the whole thing play out in movie form in my head! I love it! By the way, I've already decided that if it becomes a movie I'll play the role of Liv (jk, of course. Unless I actually get the part in auditions) Anyway, it's going great and I totally can't wait to read more!!!
I really like the events in the chapter and the drama that it's setting up Constructive criticism of the day: It happens a little fast. We should see a bit more of Ryan struggling with his conscience, and his thoughts as he tells her what happened. Love!!!
I spent so long without getting on mibba so I just caught up with all your updates. It's about damn time Ryan and Liv got together! They're adorableeee together <3 They're like a cute little happy family. It's what Lula AND Liv need. That's why they can't take Lula away :/
As, always the chapter brings a new element that just draws me in more. I love the profound paragraphs and the basic simplicities. I love the length of the chapters and the short, sweet events that go on within. This is just an amazing story. (By the way, there was a sentence that said she missed Lula...did you mean Anna?) Keep up the good work & dont lose faith :D
o_0 I did not see that coming! Definitely looking forward to the next chapter. By the way, is it a grammatical mistake or am I just tired? I didnt get the line "You know what, do you want." Should there be a question mark or another word in there or something? Cant wait to read more :D (as always)
Wow, there's seriously something about this story that I just cant describe but is absolutely amazing. I tear up at almost every chapter and always find myself connecting to various aspects of it. You definitely have some amazing talents that bring this story into the 3rd demension. By the way, thanks for the "shoutout," it means a lot to be recognized. And the new format is cool, very fitting to the mood.
I just finished reading through all the chapters, first off I love the plot of this and the ideas that you've put into it, it is definitely one of my favourite stories, on or off mibba. It's very realistic and you definitely breathed life into all the characters, even Lula who reminds me a lot of my cousin who is at a similar age.
In one of the earlier chapters, you mentioned the story Holiday, I almost went into shock that someone else actually knows that story XD.
I kind of sped through the last chapter fast to make sure she found Lula, I think it's safe to say you've got me hooked on this story.
I'm kind of rambling but I don't know how else to put it across at how much this story just hit me. You're a great writer, and I definitely hope to see more of this story soon =].
I completely agree with the above comment, please tell me you'll actually look into publishing this! Oh, and you're not the only one who's avoiding homework with this site ;) I cant bring myself to write my paper when there are amazing stories to be read :D
I always end up crying when I read this :x But it's GOOD crying, if that makes any sense. I get so into the story, that I feel everything. & I insist that this ends up being a movie. This would be the kind of movie I'd watch on a bad day when I'm depressed or on a chick-flick night. But this wouldn't be a chick-flick. Yeah, it'd be sad & what not, but it has more to it than drama & romance like other chick-flicks. I can picture myself sitting in front of the tv, with a tub of ben & jerry's, a teddy bear, & a box of tissues. & even if it ended up being a published book, it'd have the same effect. If this ever becomes a book/movie, I'd be proud to say that I started reading this when it first started out :)
Anyway, I love each update :) I'll always be a loyal reader <3 can't wait for the next chapter :D