How to Be Human - Comments

I must say, Peter is absolutely the nicest person ever. He's a saint! I'm only on chapter 6, but I love love love this story so far. So good. I love how you described Amalie crying a couple of chapters back, and how lost and in awe she seems. You are doing a fantastic job! Keep it up :D

I really dig this story! I think it's really original and I'm super interested to see what come next. Can't wait for more

I loved this chapter so much, the relationship between her and Caleb is so strange and intriguing it makes me never want to stop reading :)
Words cannot describe how excited I am for the next chapter!! Please update soon :D x

YAYYYY YOU UPDATED, I love you.

I love this story so much, its such a great idea and I've never read anything like it. I cant even begin to imagine what it would be like and how i would see the world if i was raised like that, but i think you are doing an amazing job explaining how she sees the world. I cant wait to read more, update soon!!

I just love the imagery and emotion and can't wait to see what comes next.

THERE'S A JUICIER CHAPTER WAT (you're not writing smut are you?)
(that's very un-Grampaa and I'm not sure I like that)

but ugh omfg she's so cute and Caleb actually seems half decent (although I don't entirely want to like him right now to be honest)and just ugh.

u go gurl
(go write)

that is all.

This story in a sense makes me really think about how we act and deal with things from day to day. What it would be like to have an inability to feel. To understand, and not having the want to understand, all because of the way you were raised. 'You are what I made you' <- When I read that my stomach felt like it literally flipped. I can't wait to read more. Please update soon!! I can't wait to read more.

Crap gurl, this story's got a lot of readers. (I know you usually get a fair amount, but wowzers that article just sent it through the roof.)
I was going to comment chapter by chapter (wasn't I just fabulous when Green Eyes was still a thing?) but then I realised that I'm too lazy and my comments are all awful now.

So yeah general character stuff first woo~
Um yeah creepy scientist bro be creepy like holy hell wtf man. Aw, Peter, you softie ilysfm. I'm still not sure how I feel aboot Amalie, not gonna lie, but we'll just see how the feels are going once we get to the romance we all know you're throwing in there.

And can I just say that BEN BARNES HOLY CRAP GURL I LOVE YOU FOR THAT. But not I keep imagining him as Sirius Black and I start daydreaming in the middle of a chapter so um yeah a little problematic.

And I actually started laughing when Peter was all 'yo my young son is going to show you how to shower gurl'. (Are you going to write smut or...? )

But ugh I love this story keep it up gurlfraaaaan.
/I dunno why I'm being so annoying right now I'm gonna leave otay byes!

This is such a beautiful piece of literature, I can't wait to read more. It's such an interesting idea and the characters are amazingly developed. Please keep writing, this is perfect. I'd complain only that the long chapters never bore me and I would love longer ones, personally.

Keep writing, lovely <3

I saw that this story was recommended by someone that wrote an article on it so I was like hey! I'm going to read it! Pretty into it so far:)

I just found this story from the homepage and it's fantastic! Please write some more, I'm dying to keep reading <3

is this finished? Just wondering :P im still going to read as will i read ur other original fictions <3

Honesty I am so glad that this story was story of the week because then I never would have found it. This story could never be boring, your attention to detail and description of everything from emotion to the environment is so captivating. The way you can describe her emotional lack of emotion makes me feel like Peter and i want to go help her. I got lost in these 8 chapters. Although this story is unlike anything. I've ever read before, of this were to happen to someone (which I'm sure it does a lot in the world) this chain of events seems pretty realistic. Your story is incredible and I can't wait to see what more you have, it's like you have your own writing style.

Why is this so perfect?
I don't even know how much you update this (I just read all of it today), but I saw that you already have 50,000 words of it written elsewhere, so here's to hoping that you update regularly :) I mean this is seriously amazing. I feel like I am reading a novel, except that I can't keep reading it. THE ANGUISH.

This story is incredible! The idea behind it is totally unique and you have such a way with words that I cannot help but get drawn in. I can picture everything so vividly. I could easily see this being a published bestseller if you so chose to go down that path. I'm definitely eager to read more!

The idea for this is really original, I absolutely love it! Your layout is really pretty too.

The prologue is really breathtaking. The way you use language and imagery to describe the childbirth and the death all at the same time is simply amazing. You've managed to turn what many would class as something joyous and happy into something truly heartbreaking. Not a lot of people have the ability to do that, so I commend you.

In the first chapter, when you describe Amalie's father dying, I love that you set it up and show her complete lack of emotion. It almost scares me, realising that she doesn't really show any emotion or is incapable of showing any. The fact that she doesn't move because she hasn't been instructed to is really interesting as well. She's a really interesting character already, as is Peter. I love how you've contrasted the stark lack of emotion from Amalie with the almost overwhelming amount of emotion Peter shows when being briefed on the case. You seem to continue this on throughout the next few chapters as well, and I really do think it works massively well to your advantage.

Your writing style itself is beautiful, really easy to read through. The way that you describe the officers finding Johnathan dead is amazing. The constant repetition of 'it' seems to de-humanize him for a few paragraphs, showing him up for the monster that they think he is.

All in all, I think this is absolutely incredible so far. I haven't had a chance to read it all yet (I have one or two chapters left to finish reading) but I'm hooked already. I definitely hope you're going to continue on with this because it is such a unique idea, and written so beautifully too. Amazing.

You are going to continue this story, right? I can only read one chapter right now, but I am going to catch back up with this. The idea here is so fresh and interesting. Your descriptions are amazing. The end of this first chapter is just so tragic and sad. I can't wait to read more. :O

Also, the layout is lovely.

This is so amazing. I can't wait to hear what his son says about her. If he'll feel anything when he finds what she's been through. I can't wait to read more. Please update soon!! =)

This story always breaks my heart a little... It's so damn sad and it infuriates me that, that man could do that to someone. He got the easy way out...kinda makes me mad. I can't wait to read more though. Update soon!!