Fallen Angel - Comments

yay i love Seth, he's funny and im so glad he finally told her. so cute. can't wait for more

I'm in love with Seth, you have to write more ; p

Nice update, however there were a few grammatical and punctual areas. What I've found works is if you give it a quick read through before you actually click the submit button.
You've got a new subscriber, that's for sure. I want Seth...BAD.Bleh! ha

Thank you guys! I'm glad you liked my idea. It was kind of last minute because I had to start studying:) I'll write more either this morning or later on this afternoon after school! :)

Wow, what an interesting and original idea. I do have a weakness for demons and the like. :)

I love reading this story and can't wait to read more! <3

addicted. please write more. i know college is time consuming, but i'm selfishly in love with this. I don't think I've ever found a sci-fi os as exciting as this one. I'm subscribing so I'll know when you update.

yay!! updates updates. sorry if i seem like a stalker i just uberly like this story lol and cant wait for more

~Chapter One~

I've just started reading this story but I can tell it's going to be good. I quite like the setting and the whole genre. I am certainly going to read more, because apart from the actual story line which I love, your style of writing is very nice and I find I read things just for they way they are written whether I like the story line or not. -_-'

There are a few things which disrupt the flow of this story though. Specifically, "I sighed as I let my eyes closed completely and I let my head rest on my pillows." Closed should be close. It's a simple error with tenses and I imagine it's probably just a typo. However, it breaks the relaxed mood of the story up to that point.

Also, you seem to use "then" instead of the appropriate "than" often. Than is used for comparing things. For instance, one thing is better than another thing. "Then" would be used as a term if time. ie: Then he went to the fridge.
Or something of that nature. :P I am not good at making example sentences. These things are not terrible and the story I have read thus far has been good so, they really don't matter much but I feel they are not irrelevant, especially when it comes to writing future pieces.

If you find checking through your work for mistakes hard, goodness knows I do, then maybe you could get someone to Beta for you and catch an mistakes you may make before you post chapters. If not, just remember to check and re-check for mistakes so none slip through your fingers. :)

Awesome update. She doesn't seem pretty drunk at all though, she sounds pretty sober.
Good luck with college. I'm about to start my second year, it's pretty fun, I'm sure you would think so too. Have fun and please update as soon as you can. Have a lovely day! :)

Thank you guys so much for your inspiring comments and tips! I greatly appreciate it. I might even up date another one later on today if not today then it will be either tomorrow Morning or Afternoon because I start college Monday, it could get difficult to keep updating daily but I will try my hardest:)

Hi I'm a new reader and I am definitely in love with this story.
It's adorable and incredibly sexy as hell. It's very original so thank you very much for that.
It definitely caught my attention. I hope you update as soon as you can.
I will definitely be waiting. :D

i really like it . its really good :)

still love and i think a glossary is a great idea =)

I found it very interesting the relationship between the two main characters. I really enjoyed reading this. Keep up the amazing work. :)

whoat mass detailed but uber good and very well written. normally i dont like reading sex scenes but this didnt bother me at all. good job =) cant wait for more

That's what I'm talkin about, and I think the glossary is a good idea ; p

First of all, I would consider changing the layout. It's extremely hard to read and just makes it unpleasant.

Your writing is nice, a couple of mistakes here and there but nothing major. Sometimes it doesn't seem to flow so well together though, it seems a bit choppy sometimes.

The idea is original, I really like it. I've never read a story about an incubus.

Good job so far. (: <33

yay!!! update!! still love it. can't wait to see what happens. i hope they get to stay together, him leaving her would be mass sad lol

I cant wait to see where you take this story. It's getting very intresting ; p

I really like the story idea :)
of course there were a few errors, but hey no ones perfect :P
im excited for the next chapter