Mary Jane - Comments

Updating this story would be awesome! :)

This is really precious. Like I read it, and I'm literally unable to stop smiling. I love how complex you've made Mary Jane - yes, she's real, but she's *normal* too, with problems and worries and feelings and moments that are just on the other side of awkward. It's really gorgeous, and I cannot wait for the next chapter.

love! love love love! it does remind me of stargirl, though i do enjoy the pov being from mary jane. makes the whole thing a bit more magical

This is lovely c: it reminds me of that book Stargirl, except Chase isn't as "cool" as the guyon. Stargirl. I really like this c: :

This is just beautiful.
It's short, sweet and Godly.
I love it so far, I honestly can't wait for more!

So, I was going to just read this and move on to another drabble but I realized that I had read it before, fallen quite in love with it and yet couldn't find it in myself - due to some time constraint probably - to leave you a decent comment.

I love how, in her strangeness, you've made Mary Jane so very interesting. And relate-able. I love that. You, my friend, are an amazing writer.

I read Lamb in the Spring and it brought me back to this story. So I read it all over again, you know? It's like when you finish a series and you read it all over again with a new insight. You then understand why a character behaved a certain way or said a certain thing. You understand things you didn't before. Like how Chase keeps coming back to Mary Jane even though she's peculiar.

Chapter four is my absolute favorite. It made me feel stupid though. I felt exactly how Chase did. My heart was heavy and all I wanted to do was comfort Albert. Then I remembered that it was just Mary Jane's made-up story for an old man whose name was probably not Albert. Then I felt cheated by Mary Jane for she had made me pity a man that neither of us even knew. Then I realized that Mary Jane does not exist either. She is merely a character in a story that you've written so beautifully it makes me want to drive to Albert's house for Christmas.

Thank you for an amazing story.

I've been suscribed to this but never got around to commenting. XD
I just would like to say that I love it. Characters like Mary Jane are just the best, and Chase is awkwardly adorable in a way. :') I can't wait to read more.

Ugh ugh ughhhhh, this story, it can't be expressed in words. All I can do is stare at it in absolute shock and amazement. It's beautiful. It's simple. It's straight to the point. In so few words, you open your readers to a whole new world of this character that is weird and different and beautiful. She's Mary Jane and I love her and this and everything. Reading this with classical music, I don't know, I felt like I was dying and going to heaven.

Your writing is simply beautiful. I love how blunt and simple it is, yet it tells and explains everything so well. It's like a movie in my head. You're an amazing writer and have left me wanting more. Right now I will subscribe, go check out your other stories, and comment if they're just as amazing as this. It's almost six in the morning and I've been up all night. I guess now I'll be up for a couple hours more.

To sum it all up: p e r f e c t.

I'm in love. c:

I think I've mentioned my immense love for this story a thousand and two times already, but I'll say it again: I LOVE IT SO BLOODY MUCH THAT I CAN, ER, BITE SOMETHING. I dunno what that was all about, but I truly hope you get the point c:

Anywhore, Mary Jane is one spiffy dresser and apparently, so is Chase. I have a massive thing for guys with glasses. Geek chic is in, y'knowww? And I totally love the line he gives her, “How have you been? Thrown up on anymore shoes?” This kid - both of them, truthfully - are amazing and quirky and I love them immensely. They're so original and cute. <3

Oh, and not to mention how the story that Mary Jane makes up about Albert Sr. and his "family". xD Snort! It's so entertaining to see this girl's odd outlook on herself, her family, and the world that she lives in; I've never read such well-rounded characters such as these two. I love the ending of this chapter, how they're becoming friends over this man's imaginary life.

I'm jello of your ideas. Please lend me your brain for a time? I give things back nice and shiny, I promise xD Lovely job as always, Jazz! <3

I finally got around the reading this, and it's absolutely great so far. It's really simple and laid back, and Mary Jane, although branded as this sort of outcast, seems like a pretty cool character. Like I kind of want to chill with her, ahah. Her little 'introduction' to Chase was nice as well. At least I know she's not very... awkward towards anyone, like she's too shy or whatnot. It's refreshing, having read stories where the loner usually has a hard time talking to anyone. This is going at a nice pace, nothing too humongous as occurred so far, but I'm still intrigued to read further. Feel free to notify me when you update :')

I fell in love with this, it's a unique idea and I love how she is just different yet she knows things so well, I love the way you write its amazing and also unique. I love the imagery you use in every story I've read so far. Good work, please tell me when you update? The subscription thing never works for me /:

I just fell in love with this. :D

Mary Jane is such an odd character, but in a good way. I love her outlook on her mother's trips to the "grocery store"

I'm subscribing, because you are a wonderful writer and I want to see what's next :D

Oh I loved this! I loved it I loved it I loved it! This is an adorable story.

“I suppose you need my name to tell your friends the story about the girl who ruined your shoes. I’m Mary Jane, you know, like marijuana.” The boy laughed, putting his hands in his pockets and looking down at his shoes. Digging his feet into the grass, he chewed on his lip.

“Like marijuana? Interesting. I suppose you need my name to tell your friends about the guy who you puked on. I’m Chase, like…the credit card, I guess.” He watched as Mary rolled up the dirtied sleeve on her sweater.

“Oh, I don’t really have friends. But it is nice to know your name.” And with one last smile, Mary Jane curtsied and walked the opposite way, towards the bushes and the moon and her car.

I loved that little conversation. The whole 'my name is Mary Jane, like Marijuana.' and 'my name is Chase, like... the credit card, I guess.' It's adorable. I like Mary Jane because she's so different. I always love stories with outcast girls wearing and thinking and saying weird things. And they're few and far between, so good job on your characters. I didn't find any mistakes, and I like how the chapter names were mentioned in the writing, and how unique the writing itself is. I like how you grabbed my attention with your unique writing, and your short little summary. It's all so beautiful. Wonderful job. I'm subbing. Can't wait for more. (:

I love love love love love love love this one too!

Mary Jane sounds like a lovely girl in the very first chapter of the story. I had expected someone who had a mental disability when you had said she was a gift.

But in the second chapter, she turned out completely opposite of what I had expected. She drinks till she is wasted and acts odd, but why? I am positive you have a reason for it, so I will read on in hopes infind out soon enough.

Great story:) I'm subbing.

Oh wow, the way you write things, so short and sweet really goes with the character of the story. I mean, the random sentences telling what characters look like make me giggle and don't interrupt the story like most telling devices do.

I'm surprised.

Though, I can't help but get a 70's feel from this story -- I haven't the slightest clue why, maybe it's the way she acts, the way she dresses, how she does her hair, or maybe how her mother is or maybe its your tone of writing, but I -really- like it, in any case, and I plan on subscribing. I want to know where you're going with this story...

It's got a lot of potential and has so much to say, in my mind, even if while reading I got confused on little bits and pieces, but! That can be fixed with me getting more sleep, hah-hah! So good luck and happy writings with this story!

Keep it going, I really like it!

What is going on?

Have I fallen in love?! WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT! HAVE YOU GONE CRAZY BITCH?! Yes, I have fallen in love with this story. If you don't keep it up, I'll find out where you live somehow, I'll hire a PI. Just don't give up on it! Thank Gabby for whoring this story in her journal, because it's the only reason I know about it but OHMY GOD! THANK YOU FOR DOING THIS!

The layout is simply WONDERFUL, MARVELOUS, BEAUTIFUL! I love everything about it.

The characters are just so damn awsome! I love how I don't really know anything about them yet but I feel like I totally do, you get it?

And I like the plot, I guess, the idea that's driving behind it, mostly centered around the characters, whcih as I've stated, are wonderful, so no pit-falls there. I hope this turns out as amazing as I think it's going to be so far! :D

I'M PRETTY SURE WE BOTH KNOW WHAT I THOUGHT OF WHEN I SAW YOUR TITLE, aha, but I like how she's pretty cool with it. Like, hey my name's Mary Jane, y'know, like pot? I don't know, it made me laugh.

I'm the type of sucker that loves a good well-rounded character with weird habits and quirks, to me it makes them all the more life-like, like this could actually happen to someone. And the little prologue thing made me happy because it had a lot of that, even the little things like how she wears a flower in her hair, I thought that was really cool.

The second chapter, my lord I fell in love with her, aha. I mean, she's just so blunt and out there. I feel like she's the girl that came to the party by herself, sits by herself and drinks, and then just leaves. And she seems so content with that. And she doesn't care if she's wearing an ugly Christmas sweater or not when she goes, aha. When she patted their legs I laughed a little bit. :D

And then she puked on his shoes, quite classy, aha. ;)

I don't know why, but I like Lovely Lilac lips, I'm guessing that's the lipstick shade? I just thought it was a cool way to put it. And "I don't have friends", like I said, I like her bluntness. But that makes me sad how she doesn't have any friends! D:

The last chapter though made me said because no one ever told her that they loved her and it's just like D:
I LOVE YOU MARY JANE. It's true though, most people don't say I love you all the time anymore, which is sad. And she counted so... gah, I feel so bad for her.

SAFE TO SAY, I like this. It's realistic but cool and you have really pretty writing. You best be updating this, girl. ;D