yuuup. Caleb's mother is a straight up bitch. haha. & I'm happy Gena said yes to being the maid of honor..even though it may be a tad bit awkward since Baylee has some feelings for Zacky..
...Caleb's mom sounds like a straight up bitch. & he shouldn't have kept that from Baylee, she deserved to know that his mom didn't really like her../:
I wish Zacky would've said more about him & Baylee having feelings for each other...even though he's getting married.. & I get that Michelle's angry that Brian cheated on her, but Crystal's dead, she shouldn't be saying shit about her.
hmm...is Caleb cheating? I'm kinda getting that vibe.. and Baylee needs to hang out with Zack some more, even though it's kind of making her question her relationship with Caleb..because it kinda seems like Zack is more concerned with making sure that she's okay than other stuff.
I like it! It sounds a lot better, to what Baylee would be acting like dealing with her death. Um, I like how you're slowly pushing in Baylee questioning her relationship with Caleb. Or, that's what I noticed even if it's not what you're trying to do. Anyway, please update soon.
I will not deny it; I have no idea what the hell is happening in the aspect of knowing the people mentioned. Band wise. But the over-all structure is put up nicely, I enjoy the way that the speech just flows into the general text. Very nice for a first story :3
I feel like the way you wrote Baylee's reaction was alright, but I do agree with Haner's Harlot. And I hope Baylee listens to what Crystal wrote in their scrapbook.
I really think Baylee's reaction was only good in the middle close to the end. To be specific, it's where she starts crying and being irrational, (where she's talking to Caleb). The beginning was good of she was in a "numb" phase, and the very end I think it could've been that Baylee still held a grudge or the two kept fighting.
Other than that, I really liked this chapter. Please update soon. :)
What what whaaat is happening with Crystal? o: She isn't dying..is she? Or is she moving to California to be closer to Brian? I am curious to know! >.<