Diablo:The Beginning of new Anguish - Comments

You have a couple of grammatical errors but nothing that can't be fixed with proof reading :)

You have potential, keep up the good job <3

Yes, I realize the beggining is rather shaky, it gets better though. At least I hope so :)

I love the Diablo games, and I kind of stumbled across this randomly. As far as the storyline goes, it seems pretty awesome. However, in the first chapter you begin almost every single paragraph with 'I', which makes it very tiresome to read.

i was always a fan of the games so this story is pretty much a dream come true! keep it up

Yea I gatta work on grammar more. Thanks for the comment and I'll definetly be posting more chapters.

At first, I didn't know that it was based off of a game, but I could definitely tell as it went on.
You have a fast-paced sort of writing style, and I think it's pretty easy to get into.
I think this has a lot of potential, but you just have to watch out for small gramatical errors.
(Just small things like their vs there or placement of commas) :]

Let me know what you guys think. If I should invest in a new layout let me know as well. Also tell me what I need to improve for the chapters to come. :)