Young and Pregnant - Comments

Umm, so I just noticed that in Chapter 8, the author left at the end that Cass would visit Summer "tomorrow". I might've included this in my chapter but I just now noticed, plus, I was mostly trying to keep pace with Chapter 9 so.... that kind of looks awkward in the story. The character says something she's going to do but never does... should we fix that?

For the next five people to write- You are the LAST five people to write. It's part of the criteria for your chapter that at this point, you should be trying to push the story to completion.

If it's not possible (and I'm not reading this until all chapters are written, to be fair, so I have no idea if this is possible or not) try to build to at least a climax, or do what you can to give the story some resolution and direction.

So, quick question, is it currently July? Because I remember stating previously that it was May, and if she's two months along that would make it July, and it's also been said that Alec is leaving in September and returning in late January. Just wanting to make sure where we are as far as time is concerned.

Also I agree with his rose; I don't think she would be "swollen" yet. Lightly showing yes, but not huge.

so I'm slightly confused. You talk about Cass having a swollen belly, but she's only two months pregnant. Did I read that wrong because when you're pregnant you don't show until month four or five at least

Hm... And I was really, really hoping that she would abort the baby. -sighs- Oh, well.

I figured you all would be more likely to read this than the forum page, seeing as you'll get the notification.

If you'd like to take another chapter(because you missed yours or just want another), please just let me know in the forum page. I'd like to see this story finished.

Sorry that I didn't post my second chapter. I have it written but it sort of clashes with the new one. There was a storm and I couldn't get on the internet. I hope that it didn't aggravate too many people!

Good job everyone who's posted so far. Please be sure to keep checking back to the forum thread for updates.

This is amazing!!! Keep it up, p.s I'm subscribing

Wow you're actually a really good writer! Cant wait for more :)

this story is really good (:

"Well I'd say that fucking was your problem in the first place," Jackson commented as a Christmas party flashed over the screen.

Haha, his rose; that was a great chapter! I loved that line the best though. It made me giggle.

I can't wait for my day to come. xD
The second chapter was great. :)

Awesome first & second chapters, guys. :)

Wonderful first chapter. I liked the conflict in it very much and the ending had great imagery.

Well done on the first chapter. :)

Writing relay contest story, if you're interested there's info in the summary!