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  • Stained Glass Eyes.

    Stained Glass Eyes. (200)

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    I really like this. It was in a easy to read format, I'll start out with that.
    Its sad how she can't tell her mother shes a dancer :(
    Also, I'm curious as to what might happen with that maid ;D I can't wait to read more.
    June 27th, 2011 at 04:22am
  • Saya

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    Ooo, a very grand beginning, might I say.
    So, that is his only sin? I highly doubt that, but we shall see...
    The description, as I knew it would be, is amazing! Really, I know I've told you before, but you are talented.

    Only two mistakes I caught were:
    "Everyone in the room stood watching the princess and princess as they stood."
    ^ I think you meant prince and princess

    ""Shall we my lady?""
    ^ There should be a comma after we.

    UPDATE SOON, LOVE! <3
    June 16th, 2011 at 08:52am
  • Saya

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    This layout is adorable! Not at all like you other ones, but, it's still dark if you read the summary with it. Did that make any sense? XD

    Ahh, I've never heard of this fairytale. Gosh, I'm so ignorant now-adays! I shall be awaiting your first post of this tale! <3
    June 16th, 2011 at 08:20am
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