July 20th, 2012 at 01:51am
[here from comment swap, only read the first two chapters]
This story is really cute so far. The banner is gorgeous and the colors are nice, though the white font is a little intense and tough for me to read, but I've got crap vision, so whatever. I haven't read MCR fic in ages but this is super nice. You get the family dynamic down nicely and your writing style is nice. My only issues are with some use of the passive voice and little bits where it sounds slightly awkward. Still, I like Bandit's character a lot and Lindsey seems like a really wonderful yet stressed mother. Reading the comments, I can tell there's some good stuff to come, so I may continue later if I find time. Good work!
I'm not a My Chemical Romance fan but that doesn't really matter. I love the title. It's intriguing. The summary is short and sweet and I like that. The description of the song's meaning to Bandit is beautiful. I can totally relate. I saw no grammar or spelling mistakes. Awesome job!