Lost Myself Again - Comments

Such a sad, sad life described in a few words. I really like how you dragged out the details to really portray her emotions. Your writing style is simple and poetic. It's got that kind of simplicity that just flows well and really depicts the whole emotion, you know? However, I was a bit disappointed it ended too fast because I was really wondering what the character's backstory was and where her story could possibly go.

Such a sad, sad life described in a few words. I really like how you dragged out the details to really portray her emotions. Your writing style is simple and poetic. It's got that kind of simplicity that just flows well and really depicts the whole emotion, you know? However, I was a bit disappointed it ended too fast because I was really wondering what the character's backstory was and where her story could possibly go.

This drabble is really really vulnerable, which made it so beautiful. It felt real and I related to it quite a bit. The amount of detail was amazing and it really made me visualize the pain this girl was in. I think all of us have felt how she has, like we were losing grip, which makes it so easy for the reader to relate to. I was drawn in from the first sentence. This is practically flawless! There is nothing that I would find fault in at all actually.

This drabble is really really vulnerable, which made it so beautiful. It felt real and I related to it quite a bit. The amount of detail was amazing and it really made me visualize the pain this girl was in. I think all of us have felt how she has, like we were losing grip, which makes it so easy for the reader to relate to. I was drawn in from the first sentence. This is practically flawless! There is nothing that I would find fault in at all actually.

This drabble is beautiful. It's kinda deep and I love the flow of words. You have a beautiful writing style. And the image you painted into the readers head from the beginning is just flawless. I could almost picture her being a skinny, sick-looking girl that is giving up on life.

It's beautifully tragic, somehow. Although in the end she's kinda free finally and becomes 'infinite', but I can't help but feel like something is tugging at my heartstring. My interpretation of this piece might be inaccurate, though.

Anyway, beautiful piece. Beautiful language. You had done a perfect job for this. Kudos!

This story was blunt and brutal and beautifully written. I loved it. There was a decent amount of wonderful description, but overall it was kind of brutal and concise. Which I loved. It sort of reminded me of the film Gone, I don't know if you've seen it. It just felt like the last moments of one of the dead girls in the film. Anyway, it's wonderful. As were all your entries.

Wow, something of yours I haven't commented on? I'm shocked!

Anyway, I love how vague this entire drabble is from start to finish. I get really excited when I see a perfectly ambiguous drabble and you pulled it off extremely well.

I love the unique descriptions you use all throughout this like her bones grinding together because you don't see descriptions like that in stories. And I could feel like I was the girl because you used such a good amount of detail. I could almost feel like I was her being encased in the blackness and all of a sudden feeling light and air-y. I love how mysterious this is as well, because you don't know if she died or whatever.

What an incredible, simple read. This was great, and I expect nothing less of your writing anyway.

wow this was amazing. i really liked it, and although it was short i definitely got this wonderful eerie, then warm feeling about it. thanks for submitting it to my contest! this is actually the last entry i had to read so keep your eyes on the contest page i'll be posting the winners very soon! <3 ^-^

Oh wow, that was so well done. The flow is perfect and I can't help but want more.

That was probably one of the best stories I have read on here yet! It was amazing, no matter how short. It really got me thinking about life. You perfectly described how dying could feel. Wonderful!!!!!!!

Comment swap has brought me here. I really like your writing style, it all flows very well. This is very nice! You've got me curious. I did not notice many spelling or grammatical errors which is always a plus for everyone. Nice job! Keep up the good work!

Kristen :)

Whoa.
I really don't know what to say. Your details are so thorough and yet they don't bring the story to an awkward halt and instead push it forward.

The last paragraph was like a breath of fresh air, after all that pain, and it was summed up s perfectly in those last ten or so words.

Such an amazing drabble.

Whoa.
I really don't know what to say. Your details are so thorough and yet they don't bring the story to an awkward halt and instead push it forward.

The last paragraph was like a breath of fresh air, after all that pain, and it was summed up s perfectly in those last ten or so words.

Such an amazing drabble.

...wow...
I can't find anything to say.... there is no possible critisism to give....
That was so heart wrenching and emotion captivating....
I'm getting chills right now...
...wow...is all i can say at the moment. And if that was just a drabble I want to see what your actual writing is like... it musT BE SO INTENSE... i REALLY like this...PLEASE WRITE MORE FOR GOODNESS SAKE!!!

I always feel like I never get from these the message/meaning I'm supposed to. I like this though, I do. I've just never been good at interpreting these, probably because I just don't take the time.

She dies at the end though, doesnt she? All of the strain you described being put on her body seems like it couldn't end any other way. It was all very described though, beautifully so. You've got quite a way with words. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this!

This was one of the most beautifully written pieces I've read in a while. Your use of description was fantastic, especially the first couple of lines. It seemed to me that she was trying to reach out to someone or something in front of her, and her being so frail she couldn't hold on. I think this is a great way to describe how frail someone can become from either an eating disorder or a drug addiction. This was extremely powerful and eye opening. The ending was my favorite part though. Instead of doing the over used "and then everything went black" you said she was infinite.
Wonderful <3

This was wonderful. How I see it, this is about losing yourself, and I like how you described that without actually using that sentence. It's a setting that easily can get cliché, but you ,managed to keep that from happening. I also like how the ending isn't too depressing, but that I somehow get a hopeful feeling. I liked.

I liked this! The layout was nice and simple, nothing too distracting, and your writing is fantastic as well! :)

I really liked this! Your writing style is amazing, and the layout is pretty :)

Great job!

I really liked this piece of work. The layout was beautiful, and you have an amazing way with words. :)