How to Save a Life - Comments

I really do love this story. When I first started I instantly assumed the story would move too fast. I was wrong and I'm glad of that. I enjoyed reading this. I know things like this are unlikely to happen, but it was interesting to read.
In the last chapter, the second to last sentence,
“On nothing.” I whispered. Watching him back up then pull into the drive through.
I think you might mean, Oh?

Anyway, so far it's pretty good and I'll continue to read. There are a few things with grammar that needs to be worked on, but that's about it.

I can't say I loved it, but I can see it having a lot of potential. You have to be careful when you do kidnapping stories, because sometimes it can be very cliche and non realistic. The layout needs a bit of work simply because the font is really big and bold and it makes seem a lot when it isn't.

Really like this story. Please write more.

Since the updates here look a little long, I read the latest. First of all you need to capitalize your title first. That turns a lot of readers away. It should be "How To Save A Life." :)

I saw a couple grammar mistakes in your writing, such as "to" when it should have been "too."

He drove to quickly for my taste. Didn’t people always say to be careful on snowy roads? Icy roads? He’s down right crazy. He’ll get us killed one day. - You switched tenses and you can't do that in stories. It should be: He was downright crazy. He'd get us killed one day.

A ton of your sentences are stopped before they should be. Where you NEED a comma, you've put in a period. Look at your second paragraph in the last chapter and see what I mean.

Since I didn't read anything else in this story I can't really give you a review as far as the plot line goes and how much I liked reading it. Your grammar needs work and I think you might wanna look into getting a beta. It's pretty hard to read when you're changing tenses and putting periods where they shouldn't be. :| I think there's a forum for getting a beta to look over your chapters and stuff before you post - it'd be very helpful!

I like where you are going with this, and how you have described things. I do enjoy it, and the only criticism i can offer is that you might want to go back and double check your spelling.
Keep Writing and Stay Amazing!

Okay so right now
I've just read the first chapter, but I like it
I really really like it. Omg is it bad that I actually like Zane? His just so mysterious, i wanna know why he wont hurt her. I love zanes character

Just go over your work and look out for spelling mistakew, nothing a good read cant fix
Good job yo. Im going to read the rest now xD

This is really well written...I couldn't stop reading it! I'd appreciate it if you'd read one of my stories...but you don't have to if you don't want.. :P

I really like it :D