Give Life Another Chance - Comments

Wow! I wasn't sure how I was going to react to this, but it's just brilliant! There is such dark detail to it! I can't help but get sucked in! It's so real and there is so much beauty to it that I simply couldn't stop reading. I really hope that you continue this. I Though I should mention you might want to read back through things. There were two mistakes for each chapters. One or two were grammatical. One was spelling and another was something missing in the phrase. Otherwise, it was simply brilliant!

Its a very good story. :) People in real life go threw that, and I picture the images in my head. It makes you really want to know more about the character. :)

hey :) I really liked this...all the images were spot and were interesting comparisions that one wouldn't normally think of. I like how the story focuses just on the girl, it almost reminds me of a picture where the foreground is focused while everything else is blurry. Her parents and brother are all just a blur to her, like they're not even really there. And then when her friend comes in it adds a very interesting contrast.
O.o wow that was long. Basically, its a really good story :)

I've never heard of anyone abusing alcohol like that. haha. Interesting though I guess.
I like your metaphors. They feel surreal. "My thin layer of skin shakes and quivers as the window let’s in the cold breeze" Kind of reminds me of depersonalization.