Nerd Wars - Comments

Though it's just started, I think this story has a lot of potential, so I hope you guys continue it.
I think the whole concept is really interesting, the idea of the fall from grace, the way she turns what she learned from the 'leader' against her.
Everything was well set out and mostly grammatically correct. The only thing I could possibly suggest is that it could maybe have done with a little more of an introduction, or at least some more thorough descriptions, but that's not in any way a criticism, as it works just as well the way it is. Just an idea :)
Personally, I thought the layout could be a little more simple but then that's just personal taste (most of mine are like, two colours ahaha)

So congratulations on a story with a lot of promise! :)
~Beth

I don't even know what to say. (That's a good thing)

Although, I'm not a fan of the whole layout. The rainbow part throws me off track. Then again, I have a short attention span.

Your summary is great. I love all of the comic references. It does remind me a bit of Mean Girls, but this seems original.

Chapter One was great. I like the introduction and the detail that was put into it. I love the 'Rule Book'.

Chapter Two was really funny. I liked it a lot, and not just because they were getting naked.

:) I can't wait to read more.

"Captain America can't save you now." Hahahaha that was fucking hilarious xD Anyway, I am here for that comment swap thing so here I go..
chapter 1- Oh, that kelsey is such a BITCH.. Ugh, I'd slap her sorry bitch ass in a second xD hehe anyway, this first chapter kind of reminded me of Mean Girls but with a funnier go to it :) nice job.
chapter 2-
Hahaha Tilly is such a hard ass xD I mean, to do something like leave a guy butt naked.. hahaha and that guy, marcus, just seems so narrow minded. xD ahaha I am def. subbing. I am looking forward to the rest, especially the goth one :B heee.. nice work guys :D

Loved reading this! I like that your story is so detailed! The picture of Mario is great very intriguing! Can't wait to read more!

Ohmylanta, I love you, woman. As soon as I clicked on to this story of yours, I had to take a moment and to calm myself. The giggles were just mad, missy. I love the thug looking Mario you chose for the banner. It was so surprising, and yet, so awesome at the same time, haha. :) <3

Anyways, I am digging the lovely, readable layout. It's an epic that works, hehe. c: <3 And as for the summary; My favorite part was the bit about the X-men. After watching X-men Evolution as a kid, it really, really got your point all the way across, aha. Your depiction of them really just clicked to pieces. <33 I also liked the ending. It made me go all "O" face and be all, Oh snap, gigglys. <33 I can't wait to read the first chapter. <3 c:

Chapter One

Her hazelnut irises jumpes

I'm not sure, but I don't think the word is supposed to be jumpes? Just pointing it out, just in case. <3 c:

They noded feebly, clutching

Nodded? o:

Damn. I was so reminded of Mean Girls here, aha. They have a rule book, really? I burst out in a fit of giggles because of that, aha. I also liked the way you cinched the ending, you know? Kelsey is exactly the kind of girl that I want to see get bested by a "nerd", you know? She's very.....unlikable.

I really, really liked your detail, though. :) It was definitely amazing. The way you just clicked everything in like this, well, I dig it. <3 (:

You did a great job with this and I'm incredibly eager to read more. c: <33

I cringed -- nerds being the lowest -- because I am technically a nerd, I love video games and also love being smart, so it's about time my kind rebels. e__e

I like the layout for the story, it's pretty interesting and made me giggle -- though I wonder why the story started out with the populars -- maybe because they're the highest on the pyramid. I don't know. I don't like Kelsey, though, because she's a mean person, but I am intrigued by her character and want to find out why she is like that.

I want to know if there's something behind her and in her life that -makes- her be like that. Or whether or not she was a nerd or something before hand and climbed her way to the top of the popularity scale due to a broken family. I'm interested in that sort of stuff. I wonder if Tilly is going to plan revenge, also, like go to the Nerds, group them up and come back after her?

I can't believe they actually made a book of rules, that's so... ridiculous, in my opinion.

The story has potential, definitely, and I hope some major theme runs through the story and Kelsey gets what she's asking for, basically. You know? A lot is possible, the story has a lot of potential, so... good luck and happy writings with it. I liked it. (:

I'm actually somewhat intrigued. In the beginning of the chapter it says "Kelsey pursued" but I think you may have meant 'Kelsey pursed'. I REALLY liked the summary and it was very original. I like how quickly you establish the Kelsey's power. This is a very good story so far, and although the storyline doesn't sound too original, it is played out in an extremely original way. Fantastic job(:

I really enjoyed this. I feel like you portrayed your few characters in the beginning very well. I always do love a good bitchy person... :D
The layout made me wanna read it. I was like "Mario~" lol
I think I'll subscribe :)

Great job! I really liked it. Here is my direct opinion.
1. I adored the layout. It really sets the mood.
2. The summary was fantastic. The names the nerds call the jocks, popular, goths, cheerleaders and nerds, were perfect.
3. The first chapter begins really well. It outlines the character in a way that you know she's mean.
4. The dialoge was good. Not too much, not too little

This seems so interesting! :D

First of all, I'm like a huge geek so I LOVED the X-Men references in here, aha. <3
Anyways, this just seems super interesting and I want to know what the Nerds will do to take over the school. I'm also excited to see the chemistry between the people in these stereotypes.

There's just one thing that I don't understand. Because this is going to be a co-author story, how will you manage it? Like, I understand that each person will write a different stereotype, but will they write about the whole stereotype or just one person in that stereotype?

Oh, and also the layout is uber pretty. :D <3

Ah-mazing. (:

This story actually sounds really intriguing :D