Oh my gosh!! As awful as Mary has it, you are such a good writer that I can't hate this story!! This is amazing. :) I can't wait for Jack to be her knight in skinny jeans and nike dunks :P
You should make a p.o.v were kara slowly finds out something is wrong... I think that would make people hug their computer to snif in the BESt story everrrr made :) you've got talent