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  • alltimelaura_x

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    THIS IS SO FUCKING PERFECT HOLY SHIT
    IM IN LOVE WITH TYOU
    August 19th, 2013 at 05:30am
  • thejagrafess

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    uodateupdateupdate!!! I really really really love this story okay. please don't give up on it
    March 28th, 2013 at 04:39pm
  • yngfavs

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    Loved the update!
    They are so cute together! :)
    August 30th, 2011 at 05:19am
  • Synyster_Shadows

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    Love it as usual! Short but better than nothing, haha. Jeremy is sweet to Alix. <3
    August 24th, 2011 at 11:54pm
  • Synyster_Shadows

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    I was smiling the entire time I read these chapters. Alix and Jeremy are so cute together!
    August 19th, 2011 at 07:32pm
  • Marls.

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    So I'm very much in love with this.
    You need to update before I explode.
    Josh is absolutely perfect in this and Jeremy too. :)
    August 11th, 2011 at 03:08am
  • psimconfused

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    Josh is hilarious and very smart.
    August 4th, 2011 at 04:16am
  • yngfavs

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    She needs to listen to Josh!! haha

    Great updates! :)
    August 4th, 2011 at 02:31am
  • Synyster_Shadows

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    Listen to Josh. HE IS A SMART MAN. Aw, they had a little date and she has faith in him. <3
    August 4th, 2011 at 01:32am
  • Synyster_Shadows

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    I wonder what her dad has to talk to her about? o: and why'd Jeremy get nervous? O_o
    August 4th, 2011 at 12:36am
  • Synyster_Shadows

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    I love the update. And three updates today? Good day.
    Keep up the good work!
    August 4th, 2011 at 12:13am
  • yngfavs

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    love the story so far! Can't wait for more :)
    August 2nd, 2011 at 04:22am
  • psimconfused

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    Yes. You should definitely update again today.
    July 30th, 2011 at 05:40am
  • Synyster_Shadows

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    Josh making a move on Alix maybe? o:
    Better back off because she's Jeremy's girl.
    Awesome update!
    July 29th, 2011 at 10:08pm
  • Synyster_Shadows

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    They are cute together. It is moving a bit fast but I do that as well sometimes so. Great update!
    July 29th, 2011 at 07:43am
  • psimconfused

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    Oh my god they are so cute.
    This story is just perfect. Oh my god I love it.
    July 29th, 2011 at 03:12am
  • shelovescheese

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    Hey I don't know if it's my computer but your chapters are cut off. Other then that, your story is fabulous.
    July 27th, 2011 at 07:21am
  • wish on a firefly

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    Lay Out
    I like the lay out but it makes it hard to read the words. Maybe add a solid color in the story content area at least?

    Banner
    The banner fits well with the story.

    Chapter 1
    Maybe actually draw out a scene rather than just rushing things all in one go? I'm sorry if this seems a bit rude. It just seems like the plot is being rushed. A little more of a description of Jeremy's thoughts and the world around him would be nice.

    Chapter 2
    I think this chapter was cut off. :/

    Chapter 3
    Maybe you could explain the emotions that are going through everyone's head to help with the fighting scene?

    Overall
    This isn't a bad story because it has potential. You just got to take the time to plot the characters and develop them. Overall, this story seems a bit rushed.
    July 26th, 2011 at 05:38pm
  • psimconfused

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    You updating literally made my day.
    I got so scared when the fight was mentioned, but Jeremy definitely did kick ass, and I am really happy that nothing bad happened to him. I find it funny that Alex is considered the quiet one, he seems like a pretty outgoing person. :)
    July 26th, 2011 at 06:44am
  • Synyster_Shadows

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    Jeremy to the rescue! haha, it was nicely written. I laughed when Jeremy said "Come at me." Great update!
    July 26th, 2011 at 01:00am
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