I've only read the 1st chapter but I already like the idea. I think it'd be better though if: the sentences didn't drag or weren't choppy, and if it just flowed better. Maybe if you had someone read/edit it before you posted it. Like I said, I like the idea, there's nothing wrong with that, it's just your structure. :)
Awh... She's sick... And I wish I could afford a full body massage.... It sounds nice... -curls up in bed pouting- Anyway, I'm actually glad you have her as sick. Usually, when people have the main character throw up, it's all "Their pregnant!" Such a refreshing change of pace....
Why?!?!?! Why did you wait so long?!?!?! Grah!!!!! But aaaaawwwwww~! I want Winter!!!!! And please update soon! I am in love with this story and wanna kill her dad and I love how you point out things about Zak like him being bossy!
Why?!?!?! Why did you wait so long?!?!?! Grah!!!!! But aaaaawwwwww~! I want Winter!!!!! And please update soon! I am in love with this story and wanna kill her dad and I love how you point out things about Zak like him being bossy!