August 3rd, 2011 at 06:19am
The mash-up is a total mindfuck, to begin with xD Not that that's bad or anything.
I can't quite say much as far as plot goes, but I DID giggle at Gee trying to think up how to kill Snape
Some HP-verse innconsistancies, but none that can't be fixed.
Your descriptions are great - especially in the RoR. I absolutely adored the image of Gerard stealing people's knickers xDDD
However, there were quite a few typos that can easily be fixed and should be. There was also one part where you switched from "Mikey" to "Harry" and back again. It was where he was reminicing about DA, I believe.
It did seem a little rushed though, but I like Gerard's character. And Alecto xD "Muggles ruined wizarding society..." Oh yes