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  • fuyu-aki

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    just reread this story cause i saw it in my subscriptions and i soo want the next chapter up i love this story. cant wait on the next one :)
    August 24th, 2012 at 06:50am
  • fuyu-aki

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    next please :) have fun writing :)
    July 13th, 2012 at 09:11am
  • ButterGirl96

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    Aw. The chapter was sweet. Jacob was reading to her. Please update soon?
    July 2nd, 2012 at 08:21pm
  • katreena

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    update soon ?
    April 28th, 2012 at 05:33pm
  • just.breathe.

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    GREAT!!! Update soon please!
    March 19th, 2012 at 03:39am
  • MorgieLuvs

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    good story!! update soon please?

    xxMorgan
    December 2nd, 2011 at 05:38am
  • ButterGirl96

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    i knew jacob would win that bet. so sweet that jacob imprinted on her.
    update soon?
    November 27th, 2011 at 03:24am
  • ButterGirl96

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    i really like this so far.
    Update soon?
    November 13th, 2011 at 03:30pm
  • Bluecaty15

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    i love the story, but you should have explained why she became mute in the first place!! Does someone imprint on her?!
    September 24th, 2011 at 04:35am
  • Merida

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    This is interesting so far. I've read a few stories like this, but I'm into the werewolf scene so I keep reading them. :) You have many grammatical errors. Most of your dialogue needs punctuation.

    Chapter 1
    "What's..cousins" What is or What's, cousin's
    "Its not.." Can be 'It is not or It isn't"

    Chapter 2
    "...and a pushed..." Take out the 'a'
    "after we..." After should be capitalized.
    "...Trent side.." Trent's side
    [I...]pointing to Trent butt since she was still..."[/i ]should be "..pointing to Trent, who was still over my shoulder."
    "oh, right" "Oh" should be capitalized.
    Your a girl! Should be "You're a girl!"

    Chapter 3
    "I am, not.." no comma needed
    "What gave it away my boobs or ability to think" Should be "What gave it away? My boobs...think?" And then again when Embry repeats it.
    "It complicated" should be It's or It is complicated.
    since she's.. should be she's
    glared art should be glared at
    "..said stopped mid" stopping mid

    Hope this helps with some of the errors.

    :)
    August 18th, 2011 at 11:09pm
  • just.breathe.

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    I love it! Update soon please!!!!!!!!
    August 18th, 2011 at 10:45pm
  • ladydee

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    Good so far update soon!
    August 4th, 2011 at 08:42am
  • forever_ends

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    I like it, update soon?! :]
    August 2nd, 2011 at 11:06pm
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