Salty & Sweet - Comments

Just wanted to say, love the story and love your writing style.

I enjoy this story very much.

I loved the latest chapter and I can't wait for the next one!

I know absolutely nothing about Kingdom Hearts, but your writing style is amazing and makes me want to read this story anyway.
I LOVE the layout. It's beautiful and cute, but its completely readable at the same time. and the colors are all mostly the same tone and work together perfectly.
I agree with ^^^ that line is so powerful.
I love, also, how your chapters aren't too short, nor are they too short. and the paragraphs are broken up right so its not all one huge block of text.
Even though I know nothing about the characters and stuff, you make me feel like I do by your writing.
overall, great story so far. :)

I don't know Kingdom of Hearts, but by what I've seen so far, I don't need to :)
I absolutely love the prologue, its extremely intriguing and the description is absolutely beautiful, I literally love your writing.
And as he disappeared from my grasp, a scream echoed through the endless darkness. I love this line it's so powerful!
The beautiful writing obviously carries on into the next two chapters, and I love how in chapter one, she wakes up in a room she's never been in before with and her hair's been cut off :3
So overall, amazing. I'm subscribing because I want to find out what happens and this is absolutely beautiful, well done!

ABSOLUTE LOVE <3333333333

Demyx <3 One of the few OXIII members I remember, and like. <33 Although his laziness beasts even my grandmothers.... >,> Now I want to do a KH fanfic XD

Oh, would your characters real name be Earl or Rale? Because you know... Lea>Axel, Sora>Roxas, Isa>Saix, Ansem>Xemnas.

They're all names of the originls, jumbled up, with an X thrown in...

I liked it. The first chapter kind of made me think that it was about a make out romance. But the second one changed my mind! Oh did it!

I love the creative sense of the character in the black hood.
When I read blonde hair and it got chopped up it reminded me of the movie.
"I know what you did last summer"

But other than that I think you nailed the idea of someone begin put out of their element.

About the Layout.
For the other one Behind the mask
I like it alto. You made me confused! I thought it was a story XD I was clicking like a mad woman all over the page rofl.

I like the picture! It looks very alluring the guys neck and gives an air of mystery.

mmm nice one

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Nya~ I loved this chapter.

Raxle's frustration and confusion shows really well in this chapter and Saix's cold attitude towards her definitely reminds me of him from the games. LOL.

You did a really great job of writing this second chapter, Kudos to you for not breaking character when you wrote this. :)

OMG! You totally made my day! Sorry for the late comment. </3

But anywho, I love the simple lay out you have going on and the popsicle you have as the banner. I'm not gonna lie, it makes me want one now. ;3

Despite it being so short, this chapter displayed a lot of emotion and I can definitely picture Axel comforting the girl he loves. He's just a big sweet heart.

I hope you add another chapter soon. :) I am subbing.

Ah! Where did he go? He didn't die, did he?

The prologue was short, but it really hooked me into the story. I love your description and eeriess of your dialogue. Although, maybe a little less "..." in between words would've been better? I'm just being picky because only to me did it sound odd.

Also, this sentence is a bit awkward: His cloudy emerald eyes stared pained at my tear-streaked cheeks,

I think it should be more like this: His cloudy emerald eyes stared at my tear-streaked cheeks,

Putting the word "pained" makes it sound awkward and wordy. XD of course, wordy is good, but you know what I mean.

I like this first chapter and can't wait for more :) seriously.

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
YOUUUUUUUUUUUUUU
CANTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT
KILLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL
AXLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

I hate you -_-

MORE NOW!!!!!! XD

I love love love love love LOVEEEEE the layout.
I love the summary makes me wonder what will happen next.

I don't know kingdom of hearts, but I would love to read it anyways. :) this spuds very mysteriously good. I hope you do decide to write it <3