Don't stop! i really like this! you should probably have them try to make another baby or something like that. or that Lee has a brother he never knew about. or it could be both! anywho.... Subscribed!!
I really like the story line, it has drama, and a lot of suspense, *subscribed* I don't think you're moving too fast with the characters, it really shows that they can't live without each other.
This...is really good and hell a lot of interesting. Minor mistakes but no big deal really. I'm subscribing and hoping a next chapter comes out real soon.
You're a good writer. :) There was one sentence, though, that was really bugging me: Moms Ford Fusion was gone and so wasn't Dads Chevy Malibu. That one had an error, but the rest seemed real good, and it was written well. I can't wait to see where this is going to go.
August 15th, 2011 at 01:36am
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