Remember When - Comments

@ Kim Taehyung
thank you :) I'm actually writing now and it's easier to get back into than I expected!

I didnt realise this story was quite old. I know the feeling, I just got back to writing after a long hiatus and it's a bit scary when writers block hits. You should definitely keep wriring!

@ Kim Taehyung
thank you very much :) comments like this inspire me to start writing again :)

@ JasmineTheDreamer
I agree that's hard to tell in most cases, I'd say he's more sorry he got caught than anything else, otherwise he would have continued to cheat behind his back

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While I'm not into MCR or Frerard, this story is lovely. I really like the concept, using song lyrics as dialogue, it's something hard to pull off but you did it very well. You also painted a very believable picture of their break up, which isn't as easy as people think. There's a lot of raw emotion in this, it's amazing.
Good job, young writer!

I am not much of a fan of Frerard stories, but the beginning of this story makes me want to know what happened here. But is he sorry because he cheated, or because he got caught? That's something hard to differ between sometimes. i think it's a good idea to add song lyrics into a story is a good idea.

Oh my goodness, you totally took me surprise.
I can't lie, this was not at all my sort of thing, but I was instantly enthralled just by the first paragraph.
I do love the song though, and i loved the continuous references all the day thought. also how you separated it with italics, it made it a lot easier to read, and gave you a good layout.
Really good!

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Holy **** I was not expecting this to be so... dramatic? In a good way though! This honestly reminds me of my last relationship.... Wow thats really pathetic and sad to say but it's true. I won't go into that thoughXD This is overall just so damn SAD. Whatever emotion you were feeling when you were listening to that song it really came through to your audience from you writing and all the different flashbacks. Theres a moment in this that I remember personally. And it's seeing someone shoulders slump in defeat. i HATE it. I really do. It's like they're giving up on you, they know it's over but they still don't try for you and its at that moment that I truly loath them.

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I really love Frerard fanfics and this is by far one of the most well written ones, and trust me, I've read a lot!. I also love the inspiration from the song and how you didn't say who was who until close to the end. The use of flashbacks was really effective, not something I see often sadly. You have a talent for evoking emotion in your readers, from my experience and waht I've read of others comments anyway. Keep writing!!

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I've never read a Freard, because I've never been a huge fan of My Chem. But holy hell, this was so emotional. I am legit tearing up. You're such an amazing writer. I love the song you used for inspiration to write this. You have such amazing talent, keep it up!

I was sent here from Comment Swap

So normally I don't read Frerard fanfictions, I am a huge My Chemical Romance though so I did give this a chance. I enjoyed reading it surprisingly, your a good writer! It's really sad though and the fact you were able to manipulate my feelings just shows how good of a writer you are!

Keep writing and good luck

First I got to say I love the layout, it's nice and simple

Now with your story,
FINALLY SOMETHING OTHER THAN A 1D FANFIC!! lol I'm glad to get something like this in the comment swap feature. I love how you wrote this, and you didn't make it super gross like; like some who write these type of stories. It's also nice to see someone other then Gerard be a powerful person in the relationship. I felt like a fly on the wall with this story and I love when I do. This is a meaningful story you have here, and your descriptions are very nice. Plus I haven't found any mistakes.

Keep up the good work

I usually don't read stories like this, but turned out that I really like where its heading. Would definitely read more for sure! It is so sad that Gerard cheated, I mean it just sucks that he would do that. I love Gerard, but really? Lying and cheating on Frankie?! I'm happy he didn't take him back! Other stories I usually read that Gerard is usually so powerful and all that, but I like how in this one he is very troubled. Also I really like the song you chose.

ehh. I'm not excited to be reading a Frefard story. I've never really been a fan of them but I gave it a shot for comment swap(: As you may have noticed I am here because of comment swap. It was pretty sad to hear he cheated on Frankie. It made me pretty sad:( I mean with all the lies wouldn't it be better to just tell the truth because you're going to be caught anyways! huff. Talk about a meaningful story. Nice job!:DD

But.... WHO COULD CHEAT ON FWANKIE?!?! He's beautiful and happy and completely dorky and everybody should LOVE him!!!

It works so well as a frerard story ts really great and the song is really good too!!!

Alright so Mibba hates me and logged me
out so i couldnt send my other long ass
comment >:( So I gotta start over with the
little time I have... Avril Lavigne is amazing
so I give you huge props for using her
song along with my favorite pairing,
FERARD!!! hehee I'm glad Frank didnt
take Gee back because I'm not even in the
story and Gee broke my heart with his lies,
cheating, and assholeishness (beautiful
vocabulary right;}) It's nice to see a change
where Gerard is the whiney bitch and the
'ferard' is something of the past and wont
happen because so many ferards have happy
endings where they love each other, go through
a minor problem and HEY they are back
together and happily in love, on special
occasions theres even a baby!!! haha so
this was a big twist and I think you pulled it
off VERY well:) I know I shouldve doe you the
favor of reading your other story but I do love
me some good ferard, it wouldve taken too
long, and I'm not that big on reading Gee/Lynz
(I love the women but the conecction between
the boys is just beautiful haha;}) But I shall
attempt to read it because Bandit is in there
and I really think you are an amazing writer
(oh and because I seriously owe you for putting
you through all that reading of mine :P) So
when I get home from school, I shall do my
homework and then come read your other
story and possible rape the comment page just
like you did to mine;) haha Well I seriously
have to go, school wont stop just because I
need it to your know;) haha

xo
Anita:)

Awh, That's so sad. I really enjoyed this. It was really well written, and the song was a GREAT inspiration.
:)
xoxo
-B!

Awh, That's so sad. I really enjoyed this. It was really well written, and the song was a GREAT inspiration.
:)
xoxo
-B!

Awh, That's so sad. I really enjoyed this. It was really well written, and the song was a GREAT inspiration.
:)
xoxo
-B!