Crimson Whisper - Comments

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I was disappointed with the lack of chapters after I read the summary! It sounds like something I would be interested in for sure! I would love to see the first chapter and find out! :)

I also like the choice of name! Unique and interesting!

First of all, I love the name Maeve. I don't know what it is about it, but I love it. Second, great summary. Third, this is definitely something I'd read, there aren't any chapters. What a bummer, man!

Its actually really bugging me now that I can't use comment swap because there is no story here anymore, I've tried browsers different and everything. Anyone else ever experience this? Or could the author direct me to what to do that'd be great. Sounds like a good story though I'd love to have a read of this if I actually could access it, and from everyone else's comments it seems pretty good, so there must be a way to access it lol. Anyway just seeing if I could reach 200 words to hopefully reset the server. If anyone could get back to me that'd be great. Well I best try this comment out in a second so yeah, someone replies that would be great.Its actually really bugging me now that I can't use comment swap because there is no story here anymore, I've tried browsers different and everything. Anyone else ever experience this? Or could the author direct me to what to do that'd be great. Sounds like a good story though I'd love to have a read of this if I actually could access it, and from everyone else's comments it seems pretty good, so there must be a way to access it lol. Anyway just seeing if I could reach 200 words to hopefully reset the server. If anyone could get back to me that'd be great. Well I best try this comment out in a second so yeah, someone replies that would be great.

Comment Swap brought me here,
This sounds right up my alley, except I can't seem to access the chapters even on default layout? Any ideas

Comment Swap brought me here, and I'm glad it did, I've recommended and subscribed, thank you very much for this read, I love the layout and I like the chapter length they don't drag on and on.

I can't wait for the next instalment, I like how you don't HAVE to read the prologue you can just crack right on and read this book. I love your characters already and as I say the layout.

Comment swapper here as well!
Have you ever read House of Night? It's pretty low-levelish I think a little bit older teen vampire stuff. Nothing too fancy.
The school/vampire thing is usually an interesting idea when well written, and your story so far is no exception! I like Maeve as a character and she seems pretty strong-willed which is nice. Some more detail and description, as the others have mentioned would really help out!

Comment swapper. I think this is a pretty fun idea. Vampires and what not aren't really my thing but I like the idea of the school. It's like a vampire version of Harry potter. I'm a sucker for romance and you did it well. All round it's a good story and your very creative. Maeve is strong and all around a great main character. She has a great name to ;)

Comment Swapper here, super natural not normally my thing.
The writing over all isn't bad, but I concern when people do installment, it really breaks the flow of things for me.
Chapter 4 seemed to jump to fast for me. A kiss on the cheek leading to a cold shower.
I think your chapters could be a little longer to get in more detail.
I think I might really like Maeve, she is developing nicely.

Hi, I'm also from the comment swap. While this isn't a story I normally would pick up on my own, I enjoyed what you have, though I'd have to agree with others on the sentence structure. I would also like to see more description, such as what they look like, initial thoughts, etc. But other than that I enjoyed it a lot, update soon!

I love this. <3 Great job. :D

I love this. <3 Great job. :D

Hi, I'm from the Comment Swap! Some of the sentence structure in this is kind of awkward--not wrong, just a bit confusing. I do really like the way you describe Maeve (and the layout is really pretty!), and it seems like it should be an interesting vampire story! Just watch out for the grammatical issues, as it will distract people from your story.

I just love Maeve's personality. The layout and the banner fit your vampire story perfectly. Brownie points for that. :D Post soon. :)

I just love Maeve's personality. The layout and the banner fit your vampire story perfectly. Brownie points for that. :D Post soon. :)

The banner picture is missing. Which, I don't think is a big deal, but just to start off. Also, to me, I think the text is just a tad bit small as it is white text.

I really love your descriptions, like how you said her hair played like flames in the wind, it was just beautiful. But I can see where people have said it needs some editing. It would make more sense if you said, reached down to her waist.

So far, I really like the idea of the chapter. Vampires going to a certain college, it's a nice concept.

I seen in the comments that you're from Greece? If that's true your grammar and writing is seriously just amazing. There are only a few bumps, which can be ignored. You really are very good.

I really like this story so far, although the tense switching threw me off slightly, but I got back on track!
I like Mauve, I can tell you've put a lot of effort and thought in to creating her character and that's a rare thing.
I think this story has a lot of potential but I do agree with a few of the authors who have commented, it could do with editing, because then it would be an amazing story :)

So, I found this to be pretty confusing, and as I read it, I can only think of Vampire Knight. Would I be incorrect in thinking that you pulled inspiration from that work?

Before I forget: The picture in your layout has been moved or something, because it doesn't show.

I noticed you are from Greece, so I don't know if English is your first language or not. But these chapters need quite a bit of editing. They hold so much potential, with interesting characters, but the way these read is very awkward.

You could definitely do with more detail. Especially with Seth - he has the potential to be such an interesting and chaotic character, I just want to be able to imagine him much more clearly!

I'm wondering if maybe part of what feels awkward for me is that the story jumped into action so quickly? Maybe if the beginning had been developed further before we're thrown into the midst, it would be much easier to follow. As it is, I feel like it is hurried.

You have a good idea here, I definitely think!

Again, this is a story that I normally wouldn't find myself reading, but as it's a change from the usual, it's good. :)
Just like your other story, I think this plot has potential! Like everyone else, I find the switches between tenses a bit confusing as well as a few descriptive paragraphs, but I like where it's going. I think you could really create a great story with this so keep it up! :D

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Firstly, I really like Maeve as a character. Again, it seems as if you've put a lot of thought into how her thoughts go, and how she reacts with everything that is happening. Your introduction leaves a lot of questions in my mind, which is a good ting. It keeps me reading to see if you answer them at some point. Although dealing with a cliché topic, you seem to make the plotline your own which is a sign of a good writer.

Again, your tense seems to chop and change quite a bit, which makes it rather difficult to read through without having to double-back and read the sentences again. I'd read through everything and do some editing if you can, just to make it easier on the reader.

The story is interesting all though a bit cliche, what with the vampires and all, but it's still good. However you are mixing your tenses and that makes it a bit frustrating and confusing to read. You should also revise some of your descriptive paragraphs, as they are confusing as well. Some sentences are missing vital words that would make the reading experience smoother.
Anyway good story, keep it up.