October 20th, 2011 at 03:58am
Title=Good
Layout=Needs serious work. The picture of the angel-dude? A little weird.
You need to start your story with a bang. Hello? A shock. I was totally not pulled in. (And I like these kinds of stories.) Give it some action right away, not what's-his-face stopping a woman from tripping.
Just a bit of advice.
I leave for what a few weeks and you write this up? You. Are. Magnificent.
I squealed after every chapter >.<
I really wonder why there are so many demons, sigh. This is getting so much better after every chapter!!
I feel bad for the girl though :/