First of all, who the hell are these buffoons and what do they have to do with Frank? Poor guy. I just wanna hug him or something. xD
But I want to know how Frank met these guys in the first place. And who's at the door. :tehe:
One spelling error: "Here's my address, drop by whenever you want," I said, handing the paper to Mikey." Simple spelling mistake. There are two "d" 's in the word address. =]
I randomly came across this just now, and I'm hooked.
I've spent the last few hours reading a terribly intricate and over-phrased novel, So reading this was a complete breath of fresh air, hahaha :mrgreen:
I fell in love with the storyline completely. I've never read a story like this before. And, gah, "Vranck." I shouldn't find it funny, 'cause he's deaf and all But it's just so adorable and cute and sfjhdsjkgds amazing.
i love the twists you keep putting in this story....they keep me intrigued to the point where i'm rather impatient for the next update...like this one! =]
i love the connection you're building between gerard and frank and frank and mikey and giving the insight to the relationship mikey and gerard have....though now i'm intrigued to know what else was behind gerard's 'thank you'...flaws and all, i think this story is amazing, it's a story i get excited to see updated! can't wait for more!
Very, very good. I'm glad they're teaching Frank all the hand signs. :D
A couple mistakes that I caught: "I'lllearnteach you how to spell, first. Talking will go way slower than it would with words, but the alphabet is easier to learn," Mikey explained, putting his fist in the air, the palm turned to me as his thumb stayed next to his fingers instead of clamped underneath them. "This is an A." Learn is the act of gaining knowledge, while teach is the act of giving knowledge to someone or something else. In this case, since Mikey is giving knowledge to Frank, it would be teach. =] And the same goes for the next couple chapters when you used learn instead of teach.
We continued the alphabet, having our hands point with either one or two fingers, make an 'picobello', create the 'loser' sign without putting it to your forehead, sticking out thumb between our fisted index and middle finger. Simple, really - because picobello does not start with a vowel, it doesn't need the extra 'n' at the end. It only needs the letter 'a'. =]
I hope you don't mind me pointing things out like this when I see them, I just like to give the author more feedback than just telling you that this is awesome. :mrgreen: Because even though this is a damn original story and I love it, every author deserves to know their flaws.
Hiya, I just wanted to say this is an awesome and grandly original fic! I'm loving it -but please hurry and post more chapters! I hate waiting when the story is so good!! Thankz! <333
There's only one 'f' in mafia, by the way. ;D
I don't...really know what to say now.
Poor Gerard though, getting caught up in all of this for nothing.
Sorry for such a shitty comment.
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